A Toy's Duty

aw, cute poem! Original and funny.

The rhyming is almost perfect, and ........it's cute! I don't really know what to say. I especially love the Teddy bear's comment.

Keep it up! Just a question: Why is this poem categorised under "Fanfiction?" Am I missing something?

Don't stop writing.

Mysticalxx

anther great short story from Wonderwoman i like this one good job

Sooooooooooooo cute love this! im a sucker for a ryhming poem! also very true.
one thing is i think you mean here, not her.

Hey.

I don't think this should come in humor, nope nope, I'd expected something funny. This was kinda serious talk. Anyways. I liked the idea, why don't you extend it a bit? Won't it be better, of course it would lol.

It's a Toy Story thing? I guess. But whatever, no tech glitches, it was nice. Liked the rhyme scheme with dialogues and all.

Good job.

Keep writing and stay blessed.

xoxo

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it is pretty good

AutumnINK Here for a review....... rhyming is important in poems and you did that very well that way the reader enjoys the poem more and must continue reading. the dialogues between the characters is quite good but im more impressed by the toys care for their owner potraying them as more than plastic or wood by giving them a heart.

"Teddy bear: "We are here to lessen a tear for a little girl so dear."

Horse: "Or to keep a boy from crying,

For their love I won't be denying."

Doll: "Then I'll sit here for my girls

And while I wait I'll fix my curls."

This dialogue entails all the poem is about "a toy's duty" well done.

Hi! This is my first review, so I will try to make it count! I really liked this poem. The dialogue wasn't really my favorite though, switching back and fourth by showing what the toys said how you did. I would try to make it more poetic and make it flow better. I wouldn't know how, but it's a good idea. Anyways, I really liked it! It's a really good idea. Your rhyme scheme is really nice, except it kind of gets thrown off at one of the lines. But, good job!

Dear Nunyabusiness,
I will review on your poem. I like it very much. It was very whimsical and creative. The rhyming was very good. The rhythm was good, though a bit confusing and rough. You did a great job on this poem.
Speaking of poems, I have written a poem titled "Kingdom Beyond the Mountains". Please look at it and comment. I would deeply appreciate it. Some tips would be helpful>
Good luck and keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Very truly yours,
fantasydragon01