Show Me

Heya, Keepwriting!!

Eros here to review your wonderful poetry!

First thing which comes, is the title. The title is catchy, "Show me". It is related with the poem.
Everything is described very beautifully. I am captivated by the picture which you used. It is romantic. That was like a glow on your spicy work. I love this.

The poem was, indeed unique in itself. The choice of words were also too good. The presentation is awesome! It was a short poem full of feelings. The idea was also very influencive. I am deeply impressed by this poem. I like how you ask for the childhood to return and ask to show you that special joy.

Everything was described very nicely. It was all the desires, which you put beautifully in the form of a poem. The poem flowed well. It is well connected with the picture too.

It was a GREAT work, overall!
Keepwriting...
Never cease...
Because we all love to keep reading such superb works like this one!
Have a Great Day/ Night!

Hello! Tigerlilly here to review!

First off, this poem is very very beautiful. I love how the picture connects so perfectly with the poem, having it helps give the feel of the poem. It almost feels like a song itself and the flow is just perfect. It's so emotional... At the very end in the last four stanzas I get the feeling of longing and a subtle sorrow. You can tell the narrator is in a worried/depressive state because of how she refers to childhood and wanting to "remember that I've been blessed" and it just pulls at my heart strings.

I really wish I could find something to nitpick on, but I feel like everything is in it's perfect place and I don't want you to change it. I like the capitalization in this poem and the punctuation seems to be on point. So, I'm sorry for not finding anything wrong! You're just too talented! Please keep writing, I look forward to reading more from you!

Amazing poem..!! A very heart catching poem. The punctuation is really good and capitalization is also good. The way you have expressed your emotions and the way you have demanded again for your childhood is incredible. This poem has really impressed me. Good job and keep writing like this. Your writing is fantastic. The lines, the words clearly show what is in your heart and mind Well done pal.

Mahvash.

WOW!! I mean, seriously, just WOW!! o.O

I don't know how to criticize it..really, so, i can't really leave a review here. It's just gonna be my praise. You know, when I was reading the poem, I could really feel like being in a place like that one in the picture.

Dude, you are awesome! And, undoubtedly, your husband is gonna be so lucky!

Yo man!
Awesome awesome awesome!!! Thats wat this poem is. Realky its very lyrical... and i dont know why but when i was reading this a tne was going on in my mind and i sort of strted singing this(not that i'm a very good singer) thipe picture up tbere is also very pretty...
And i guess thats all, you already know i love all your works so yeah, nothing new about that...

Insanely yours
Fangirl~

great poem! you really uncased what it is to be happy with great visuals in such a small poem.
there are times when i too want to go back to my childhood and not have to deal with my of the worries of today. i at times want to go back to those single happy moments that made me happy.