The Hanging Tree

Keepwriting, this was amazing. The only thing I recommend is more detail. Otherwise your flow was nice and it kept me reading. I like how your took something like the Hanging Tree from the Hunger Games and created your own version. There could be more emotion in it since their killing someone and they get hanged afterwards. Great job though and it was magnificently written! Keep writing and I hope to read more of your work in the future!
AshleyDashley

Hi! I'm Gymnast2801 and I'm going to write a review.

I love this poem-and I also love how creative you where by creating something new from something that has already been written: The Hunger Games. I would say that you could add more detail and maybe more emotion to the poem.
Otherwise, this was a wonderful poem and you did a great job!

This is great! I think the only improvement that you could make is to add more detail...Imagery can be the key when trying to convey your message. Also, why did they kill the man? Was there a particular reason? But all in all, this was a very interesting piece and I love it!

This is great! I think the only improvement that you could make is to add more detail...Imagery can be the key when trying to convey your message. Also, why did they kill the man? Was there a particular reason? But all in all, this was a very interesting piece and I love it!

Hi! Calliope here for a review. This is my first one, so I hope it's okay. I love "The Hanging Tree" song, and I think it was a good idea you had to write a poem about it. You did a good job sticking to your rhyme scheme, and although a couple of the rhymes seemed a tad forced, your poem flowed well for the most part.

One thing I think you could do to make your poem really pop is add more detail. Perhaps you could do this by explaining why the three men killed Paul. Maybe they had a justifiable reason, or maybe not. Expanding on their reasoning would be a good opportunity to make your poem seem less general and further show off your creativity. Adding to the story of the relationship between Paul and the murderers I believe would also make your poem more interesting to readers. Of course you should be careful to not give away every little detail. The original "Hanging Tree" song had a mysterious feel to it, which was why I and I believe many others found it so appealing. You did a good job keeping a mysterious feel to your poem. If you could add just a few more dashes of detail while managing to still leave a bit to the imagination, that would be great. Personally, I think that could be most effectively accomplished by making the actions of your characters "gray", and not so "black and white". Yeah, the three men murdering Paul was definitely "black", but maybe you could give them motives that leave readers questioning if they were really in the wrong. That's just an idea though.

"Paul never imagined to die--" Your poem had very few errors, which was nice. Errors can be distracting to what would otherwise be a good piece. This was really the only grammatical error that stood out to me. This line should be rewritten to say, "Paul never imagined he would die--". Anyways, good job on this poem! I enjoyed it.