Young Writers Society

Hi, Becca here for a review.

This is a very sweet poem for one's mom, especially with Mother's Day.

I think the rhyme scheme was a bit awkward at times, but ultimately I thought it worked more than not. I thought you did a really great job describing the narrative of your development and provided examples of how your mother was great at each step of the way with specifics.

I think this poem could be even stronger if you used examples that are unique to only you and your mom. Do you have any inside jokes perhaps? I think this poem could also use some imagery or sensory details. What does she look like, smell like? What does she sound like, what does she feel like? Maybe some foods she makes or like or some places you've been to could be added to the piece to make it more personal.

These are obviously just suggestions and it's up to you. Hope to read more of your writing!

I love this poem, this poem is awesome and really sexy

Wow! This poem is really, really beautiful. I just love the way you have expressed yourself from when you were a toddler to now.
I can only envy your writing skill. You have a powerful voice - so use it more and more often!
Only negative remark I can make is this - you have already mentioned that your mother taught you how to be a lady, so I feel that there is no point in saying you wish that she can reach you your expertise.
But still, remember that I love this poem! I'm hope you made your mom smile with happiness!!
Actually, I am sure she did.