Lady oh Lady,
What a face like grace,
That shines like the sun.
Your hair in a bun.
Your skin like snow.
And everyone knows,
What a lady you are.
Lady oh lady,
What treasures you hold,
And gentleness told.
God bless your heart,
As we depart.
Lady of love,
The olive branch dove.
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Oh my god!
This is toally hot, hahaaa
I really like it and the image of this poem.
Especially the last line is beautiful and I
have much respect for this one.
You have a great talent and I hope you post
soon....because this one is my favorite of your work.
And I can't wait to see more... I WANT MORE ;D
Please, give me a sign when you post something new
I'm your FIRST reader......
Love; Werver.
this is a nice sort poem i like it great job
Wonderwoman keep up the good work
Love this poem. I like the simplicity of it!
The ''The olive branch dove'' sounds really nice on the tongue! Keep it up! *thumbs up*
Thank you!
"lady oh lady, what a face like grace,"
Although I'm no Shakespeare, i absolutely adore literature that you can actually "hear".
The first two sentences of this poem wholly captured me; the adoration is palpable.
...to be quite honest...i could imagine myself saying those very words..and maybe just those two sentences are all I'd need.
Thank you.
Hey.
I liked this, good poem (first try?)
Welcome to YWS, first of all
"The olive branch dove" is this relevant to this? I don't think so. Add some story to it, it would be more graceful, more intriguing. Attract your readers, somehow I felt your content didn't match up to the title at all. I would love to see more of it Like okay, you simply composed a poem, but put your heart and soul into it okay?
Keep writing and stay blessed.
xo
Thanks. Yes, this indeed was the first poem I have even written. The part, "Lady of love the olive branch dove," was referring to how graceful and beautifully elegant this person was but I guess you really wouldn't know if you just read it on the spot. Thank you for the tips! God bless.
Hello!
This poem was very pleasant to read. I especially like the last line: "Lady of love,
The olive branch dove." The rhyming helped make the piece have a nice flow to it.
As for critiquing... you might want to split the poem up into 2 sections(A and B) in between the stanzas: "What a lady you are. Lady oh lady,..." because you repeat the "oh lady" part.
Other than that, I thought this poem was unique in it's own way and I'm glad I got to read it. Keep up the good work!
~Elephant
Thanks for reviewing my poem I will take your words into consideration.
No problem
Wow! This poem is thoroughly enjoyable. It typifies the thought of being short and sweet. It has not only powerful imagery and description but also a warm, informal style. I'm truly impressed. Also, I like the repetition and the rhythm. Even though this doesn't have an established meter, its bounce and flowing nature are superb. I have been around on this website and have seen quite a few poems. So far, this one might have impressed me the most. It is exquisite! Keep writing, Nunyabusiness, and best wishes! I really mean it!
Thanks! This comment gives me great encouragement to keep writing some more.
You're welcome. :]