Young Writers Society

Hello, screamingsloth. Gxldencrxwns here for a review!

When I saw the word "Eyelash" in the title, I knew I had to click on this. The same humor from the original lingers and as always, the famous send help at the end, amazing touch.

However, I would like to see a different formatting. I know it's a parody and the original was like this, but put your own touch to it! Be creativeeeeeeeee. Just like the other two reviewers before me, the typo on the 6th line. You already know what it is, so I won't point it out.

Well, that's the end of this review. Have a nice day/night, and keep writing!
~gxldencrxwns

Hi! Thought I'd drop in for a quick reveiw.

This poem is so hilarious and unique. I've read 'Eyelash' and since its author herself has complimented your work, I guess there's no need for me to repeat the same praises with which you must be familiar by now. Like Sheyren, I, too noticed the typo in the 6th line. Other than that, the poem was absolutely flawless and it was a pleasure to read such a work. Using the box format instead of the traditional one, just like Sheyren had done, added to the quaint uniqueness of the poem. You were able to express your awkward situation and emotions so well. It was as if I was standing in front of you and witnessing the whole thing. Your amazing poem was a parody in the true sense and was an awesome tribute to Sheyren's literary exploits and talents. Keep up the good work!

Hey there! Shey here for a review!

I think it's appropriate I review this. XD Obviously, this isn't meant to be a serious poem, but I'll offer my input anyway.

This is definitely a lot better than Eyelash. The formatting is a lot better. In mine, the three lines on the right were perfectly aligned, so it was pretty static and boring. Yours, however, had different spacing, making the words appear more scattered, almost like someone was rushing to write it while also being plagued by a severe headache. Curious; Did you have an actual headache while writing this?

A minor typo, I think you meant to write "7 hours later". I don't usually correct small grammatical errors, but in a poem with 15 lines, what else can I comment on?

Overall, great piece! It was hilarious! Keep up the great work!