colourless world and a colourful boy

black.

white.

that's all my world ever was.

     

blotchy ink drops on love letters

I'd never send.

roses so delicately white they'd rot

if I touched them.

     

colourless photos posted on my blog

that everyone said was depressing.

the clothes I wore were never dark enough

to match my soul.

      

white sketchbooks filled with drawings of humans,

faces contorted in pain; bodies twisted in the life's agony.

black shapes blended with numbing white

to make blurry grey pictures.

      

but that was before.

before I met you.

      

you were the one

who brought colour

to my black-&-white canvas.

      

I unravelled like a skeleton

and bone by bone you figured me out.

you knew the forbidden secrets

carved on the lining of my body.

      

you noticed the way I flinched

if someone touched my forearm.

you noted my greying complexion

among gaunt cheekbones and ill bruises.

     

you saw my scars etched into my skin

and the black that had invaded my mind.

you looked into my eyes;

my empty eyes that told you I was lost.

     

you looked just deep enough

to see my heart,

and faintly whispered:

"let me show you a world of colour..."

     

you took away my black pens; hid my sad sketches

and enclosed me in a hug.

your chest became laced with tears

as the sunset came up.

     

that one early morning that we sat on soft cloth,

breathing in the crisp summer air.

the earth tickled our feet

as your fingers intertwined with mine.

       

for the first time in forever,

I saw colour.

unfolding in the corners of the sky,

stretching over the vast horizon.

     

pinks swirled with purples

with yellows and oranges comfortable above.

perriwinkle blue was the blanket we rested on;

lime green turned into the grass.

      

and then I turned to see your face.

you were once a black-&-white person,

somebody who I didn't think could ever

reveal to me something so majestic.

       

your eyes.

mesmerizing cocoa with flecks of brilliant hazel

gold specks rested in their magnificence

as I couldn't look away.

      

years from now, when people ask

when did you start seeing in colour

I will simply smile and whisper

"he was the beautiful boy who mended my broken soul"

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Thisislegacy
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Legacy here for a review.

The content that you wrote about is written about a lot, but you tackled that by making it written in such a way that no one has written.

I loved the imagery, I could see what was going on as I was reading. I also love how you tell a clear story.

I also love how you crossed out broken at the end. It just adds an extra little "umph" at the end and closes everything up.

Overall, a really good poem. I would love to read more of yours (which I will probably do later). Legacy.

Thank you! :D this cheered me up. I wrote this really early in the morning with not much editing and no sleep. Have a wonderful day!

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AkeliaTaske
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Hey there! Akelia here for a review!

Wow...just....wow. This poem. *stares into space* *slaps self back the computer* Anyways! I loved this poem so much. It was dark at first, but then melted into absolute happieness. Exactly the thing I love to see in poems and writings.

So like I always do, I will give you things called sweets, and sours. Sweet being what I loved about the poem and good things you did, and sours being what you could improve on. Let's get started! We'll do sours first, to get it over with.

A. I noticed there was rarely any capitalization. The only things capitalized was I, I'd, etc. everything else was lowercase, which should not be in any writing, or texting for that matter. Although, this did not distract from the reading too much.

B. In the stanza (statement) "But that was before. Before I met you." I found this to be a bit confusing, and it didn't really flow well. Prehaps if you changed it to "But that was before I met you." or, "But that was- It was before I met you." it might be a bit better.

Now onto the sweets!

A. The stanzas were well written! Commas and periods were used in the proper places, and it made it MUCH easier to read.

B. The whole poem in itself was beautiful, and was enjoyable to read. It drew me in, and I loved it.

All in all, you did pretty good. Remember, never stop writing!

-Akelia

Awe, thank you! <3 I'm glad you liked it, and I love your method of "sweets-&-sours"



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