Young Writers Society

This poem should not be in the humor section. I don't understand it either. You have really good potential to be a great writer. You can do whatever you put your mind to. Sit down and write one really short meaningful poem to get started. Oh ps, I didn't read any of your other work so sorry if this seems mean but I wish someone would tell me this \.

What a great poem! I can relate so much to this! I legit just finished my last midterms and let me tell you the last 3 days (of all midterms) have been the hardest and most stressful tests I feel as if I've ever taken!

Hey, Dogs here for a review!

I love the imagery used, I can actually see myself and others staring into space, and I can see those going to the restroom escaping. And then wondering to myself if I'll forget my phone, which I actually almost did today in one of my classes, and my teacher goes "Uhh your phone." and I was like "right...." XD

Anyway enough of my lame stories this review is about you!!

You definitely showed how a midterm feels like perfectly I have nothing bad to say!!!

I really liked this poem and can so relate!

Keep up the great writing,
Love,
Dogs

What a great little poem. Many of these lines can be applied to a lot of things, not just midterms. "We will not be rewarded until time's up" resonates with me for a lot of parts of life. Work, school, working out, traveling, even relationships.

"I stare into space/it feels like it's been forever since/well, since it was taken away" - I enjoy the ambiguity of this line and the way it dives right into the crux of the speaker's problem. I wonder what "it" is, "it" could be anything, time, space (both personal and metaphysical). I find the tone of this poem so real in the immediateness of the speaker's problem (the midterms) and existential at the same time. Certain words point to the existentialism, i.e., time, space, forever...

It's almost melodramatic, but not quite, "i can no longer endure this cruelty" is such a great line that expresses how distressing the situation is. Seven midterms crammed into one week, holy crap. I don't even think we had that many midterms crammed into two weeks when I was in high school.

I really empathize with you and I definitely enjoyed reading this poem.

Thanks for sharing.

-Dream

What a stressful piece, every word is crammed with tension. Have you ever seen a cheetah seconds before it takes off? Every muscle tensed, straining, quivering right before it explodes into a frenzy of energy? That's what this is. Only there is no release, it feels like late nights with too much caffeine, when you need to move, to leave, but you're trapped in yourself.

I love how you've written this, it is almost two stories in one. On one hand, you have the upset of the midterms (always stressful and annoying), and my first read it seems as though the thing taken away is your freedom, but on my second read i realized my mistake. Or am I, because I use my phone to escape. Through music, talking to friends, reading, etc. My phone is my escape from my head and my surroundings.

This whole thing is well written, great grammar, perfect spelling and an excellent use of punctuation that really adds to your tale.

Fantastic job,
Keep on writing!