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Coming Home To You

by postmalone

I'm coming home, baby

On the flight I felt alone 

Gathered up my luggage 

And began my drive home

I see your face in gleaming lights 

As my mind travels to you 

The highway feels so lonely

And the sky's a navy blue 

The exit signs are glowing 

Drivers are racing by 

But I slow drive and I take my time

Cause it'll be a long night

Well the airport's a crazy place

But as the clock ticks on

I smile then and think of when 

I'll see the face you don

I'm headin' under(neath) bridges 

And swerving around bends 

Curving my way across different lanes 

As the trip comes to an en-hend

I pull up at your quiet house 

The little porch lights are shinin' 

You open the door and my spirit soars 

Our smiles connect, intertwinin'


You run to me as I run to you 

We collide in a firm embrace 

Your warmth resonates through me 

I've found the one I'd chased 

Don't know how long we stand there 

Huggin' 'n' the middle of the night 

I breathe in the smell of your skin  

The moon is ever so bright

Your heartbeat calms me as your kiss excites me 

We hold each other close 

I look into your eyes, see my future flashing by 

And I don't let you go 


Baby I don't let you go, nooo 

Baby I won't let you go 

If I promise you one thing I can do 

It's that I won't let you go

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Thu Jul 13, 2017 2:19 am
GinaERufo wrote a review...

Hello :) I would like to start by letting you know that was a beautifully written piece and I enjoyed looking through it very much. I feel like it is a relateable topic, which made it so much more desirable to read. I am glad that I clicked on it because I was NOT disappointed. So with that being said, here are a few things that I found while reading

"The exit signs are glowing

Drivers are racing by

But I slow drive and I take my time

Cause it'll be a long night"\-----to me, this just seemed a little out of place compared to the stanzas before it, but that may have just been the way I was reading it to myself in my head, so I wouldn't worry about it too much. Also, I assume you meant to write "but I slowly drive and take my time" because I think that works better but its okay, its only a simple mistake

Overall, I don't want to be repetitive , but everything I said in my first paragraph was 100% true. This was beautifully done and stirs emotion from people, which every good writer should aspire to do. I truly look forward to reading more of your poems or other forms of writing because this has made my night, it is so well done. :)

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Sun Jul 09, 2017 2:20 pm
Eros wrote a review...

Heya screamingsloth!!

This is Eros here with a review for you...!

This topic attracted me very much--- so thought too peek in... And how could I leave this AWESOME piece un-reviewed by me!?

So... At the first place, as I said the topic is really attractive and very apt to this piece of literary which narrates a story in a unique style... Wait! A story...or rather should I say a journey?...

A beautiful journey described here. A journey in such a great eagerness and keenness to meet the other person, of course a near and dear one or a loved one.

This was indeed romantic. And you have given ample of adjectives to "show" us the romance rather than just "telling" or "narrating" us about it.

Examples of this can be:

the souring or rising high of the spirits as soon as the 'baby' mentioned here opens the door...

Many other things like the scent of the skin, the heartbeats, the smiles etc also helps to see the romance over here... And...What else...?

Yes... One thing I would like to suggest is to inculcate punctuation in here. For there is not a single coma or a semicolon...or anything you know... This is must, I'd say because it helps the reader to get a sense that where he/she should stop, take a little pause or get some information that the idea is in continuation.

Yes, the word, 'continuation' reminds me the flow and continuity of the piece. I should say that this work has an EXCELLENT flow and continuity... Just the little punctuation would help add to it. Well, I do respect if it's your own style, but still, adding punctuation helps a lot...you might have any other personal style also, which I don't mean to suppress or anything like that...

Rest, everything is expressed really BEAUTIFULLY!!

I liked this piece very much...

PS: I am going to experience this if I get good scores in the entrance exams and all, and if I get to travel and then return after a long time... :D

So... Keep up the GREAT WORK!!

Keep writing such AWESOME and AMAZING stuffs!!

Have a great day/night!


postmalone says...

Aaawwwee I hope you do get to experience something magnificent and indescribable like this!! I have to admit, I like your reviewing style. Instead of long paragraphs and super advances vocabulary, or just randomly rambling on, you make sure to leave a positive touch on your words. Thank you so much! I plan to submit another poem or song in a day :D :D

Eros says...

Yes, Sure! I will surely read it! :D

Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.
— Enid Bagnold