Young Writers Society

First: There is 3 adverbs that can be omitted.
secondly: There is really no need to italisize, in my opinion, but hey, do what you want.

This is good though.
I disagree with this poem though.

I love this! You are having a internal conflict kind of thing going on here! It is cool, and I feel that you do not have to worry! Being popular is not important! Just be nice to people, and everyone will like you back! I can assure you! Looks, and talent mean nothing! It is what is in the inside. If you do have this extra talent, it is just a bonus! Great idea, and very unique! It is also cool, because it is sort of like the pep talk many people give themselves everyday! It is also very comical! The last part, where you keep interrupting yourself was very funny! Great job! I am proud! Keep writing!

Hmmm. I was honestly a little dissapointed when I read this. I couldn't tell if he (or she) was talking to someone or themselves. I know poetry usually has very minor details and leaves lots up to interpretation, but I feel it could have at least explained who was talking. Also, I feel this would be a better short story than poem. It has a good plot that lots of people can relate to. My final thought? You did well, but you approached this wrong. Consider turning it into a short story and this will be simply amazing.

Very clever. I like it.

FALL OUT BOY

I should be so popular! XD I sing in a Choir and all the time to myself. Instead, people usually just look at me weird. Their reactions are usually something like this:

<_< What the heck are you doing? STOP SINGING, we're in MATH CLASS, you idiot.
>_< Quit it, I'm trying to work!
>:O No one likes your song choices. Shut up!

I agree with pretzelsing...

I love to sing alot but that doesn't make me popular.I usually don't sing in front of people:-).

I sing
But it don't make me popular

Oh. My. Wow
Hey, Strange! You used to be 'StrangeLove' right? Where did the love go? xD
So, this isn't a review, since there isn't much to review, but DUDE! This is hilarious! God, I was laughing like a pig (not really xD)
I look forward to more of your poetry! The rhyme and flow was great, but nothing beats how funny this was.

I love this! I can totally understand the feeling - while I do enjoy playing instruments and singing, I don't play instruments that can be found in your average high school band (and my school doesn't have an orchestra -_-). Thus, whenever I go to my school's "talent show," which is mostly comprised of all the popular kids singing songs I hate or playing band instruments, I feel this way.

I love how simple and to the point it is, too. The back-and-forth gimmick is cool.

Hello!
This is hilarious! I love it! I like how you had the other voice italisized, it makes it a lot easier to read. I really thought the way you wrote it was okay. Different people like different styles of writing. I really couldn't find anything to really correct, except maybe the title. I don't know...it just bugs me. Then again, I have a weird mind, so it may just be me. But, I would consider revising it. Other than that, this was really funny! Great job, and keep writing!
~Snazzy
Stay Awesome

Hello, Tay01 here with a review of your poetry.

Well, to start with, this poetry is kind of weird. ( sorry if I start hurting your feelings ) This poetry is more like a script or a conversation. And it is as if somebody, I do not know who but that SOMEBODY forced you to have a passion in music. Took me to read at least three times to understand each verse.

Furthermore, this poetry is almost too short. You used like only three words each line. I you asked me, that is a bit too short. I do not really get why you did this. ( I know I am starting to go bad, so sorry if I did )

Next, your poem is a little, less meaningful. You only have one main point, and that is making you be popular, which in this case, you do not want to.

Moreover, this is the first word EVER in your poem. 'Swagger.' Some people think 'Swagger' is not really a good word. It is more of a club and older teenage word. Try not to use this word too often, just a quick reminder if little people read this.

I do not really like this poem, so I think you should add a little more detail, politeness, length to your poem and a bit of rhyme.

Okay, and alright, that is basically it for now. I do hope you make these changes. Thank you.

~~Tay01, New Young Writer Society Member.