Young Writers Society

Hello, darling! This review is probably going to be a little sparser, but let's see about tackling this piece. Nitpicks first, just because.

along with a handful of books.

I have a small issue with this line, as it's underhandedly implying that the three books you mentioned before are not, in fact, books—it's quantifying what you have on your bookshelf as "Infinite Jest, Ulysses, Lolita, and books". While this may be acceptable considering your uneducated narrator, I think it's a little distracting, and I don't think the flow would suffer if you added a little "other" before "books".

filled with literary classics and say

This one is a little more excusable by the uneducated narrator, but I am dying for at least one comma in this line. It's killing me, Will. You're tearing me apart. I mean, you could at least add a comma after "classics" so it doesn't feel so grammatically bare, considering I keep reading it in one breath without a pause, implying "filled with say "wow"".

Now an overall review. I do like that you're playing off the fact that this actually does happen, and I'm sure most of us on this site have been guilty of this at one point or another. (Uh, not me. Totally not me. Let me go hide that Atlas Britannica...) But in all seriousness, this poem has a very human element in its satire, and I think that's why I keep coming back to your writing: You manage to strike these little things at their core, and that makes people uncomfortable to face the truth because they know it casts an unfavorable light on them. I'll admit, some of your poetry has made me a little uncomfortable (mostly when it goes overtly sexual, hah), but you make people think about these things they wouldn't normally contemplate.

In short, four for you, Will. You go, Will. It could flow better—see my above points—but I don't think I have much in the way of a content review. Keep on writing!