@Kayley01 here for review. So I think ii get the idea of your piece.
You have all these words trapped inside of you trying to get out.. all your feeling and emotions can't be spoken so the only way you can express them is with ink and paper.
I like the idea of the poem yet there were some mistakes in your lay - out.
So the first mistake I noticed is that "The Sky" is capatilized. I can sometimes make this mistake too. Don't worry everybody makes mistakes. Anyway the point is there is no need for the sky to be capatilized. It isn't a name of a person or place it is a thing.
The lay-out confused me because you should have put more full stops or commas in a lot of places.
I like the way you described a lot of the things like the sky or your emotions or the way the blood dripped on to the page.
Anyway this was a great piece and keep writing!
Yours sincerely, @Kayley01.
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