My poems are blurring together,
Eventually they just sound the same.
Same meaning, same rhythm, same rhymes.
My inspiration is lost.
My heart is torn and ragged,
From the woes I have suffered
And also my readiness to throw myself
Into just about anything.
I used to be good, people reading my work.
Literary Spotlight, friends reading my poems,
Enjoying my emotions. The whole shibang.
Now I feel like a washed out rock star.
No inspiration, No muse. No purpose.
I don't have "it" anymore.
Whatever I had is gone.
Is it my passion?
Or is it simply the strength I once had
To continue what I started?
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I love this poem! Seriously, I think all of us here can relate to this poem on a spiritual level, defyingravity01. And I would just like to say that you definitely do have "it", whatever it is that makes us mediocre, amateur writers become really great. I remember a time when I thought I had no more ideas in my head. I was completely washed out, too. And I was really, really scared. It's frightening to think that maybe your imagination has a limit.
I, however, have no doubts about you. You are the kind of person who can write about nothing and make it sound lovely. Great job!
Sincerely and truly,
Smanske15
Hello!
Emilykay10144 here...
I simply love how you wrote on a poem about confusion of what to write. It is beyond brilliant!
This line,
I love it. This line explains exactly how you feel. Everyone knows how a rock star that has nothing now feels and now people are feeling exactly you feel and I LOVE those kind of poems.
This is my favorite poem that I have ever read before.
Keep up the great work! I love it!
-Emilykay10144
It is really sad, and I could feel confusion, sadness, and a certain emotion that I cannot put my finger on. It is difficult to imagine that you could lose something that important, that was just inside your head. It hurts. But I know good poetry when I see it, and this is one of the finest examples. I can't say most of the things I usually say about peoples work because this is so fine. And "it" might be the ability to put words together in different ways every time. The only thing that makes a writer good (besides handwriting) is the ability to make the words flow.
I put this magical divide in between your stanza just to illustrate how disconnected the phrases are too each other. The second stanza is an obvious attempt to reach for the readers empathy which counteracts its attempts in doing so. Think about the blandness and the blankness that goes into a torn and ragged heart- the woes of a teenager that has writers block willing to throw himself off a bridge for the sake of poetry. The only way it would be honest is if you actually did it to establish credibility. It is not logical, original or helping the clarity;for those reasons it is just there. You reader will read over it with a blank mind and no emotional response. What some people call it is fluff but I tend to call it wordiness- words that don't do anything for you.
The first four lines has some awkward phrasing. Think about how a poem could blur together, it would be very difficult for a technical writer to explain a phenomenon such as that. What is hurting this poem so much is the lack of attention to detail; the first two lines don't seem to be grammatically coherent together- like it was a mixture between past and present tense. The rest of the poem just has a lot of listing like attributes to it- you list the problems; same meaning, same rhythm, same rhymes, your inspiration is lost, your heart torn. The next part is about the symptoms; you use to be good, you literary spotlight is taken away, friends no longer reading your poems and the rest- leads us with a question meant to stimulate our minds.
Anyways, some comments on writers block;
Writers block is something that happens naturally when we get out of a mode of being able to write like we once did. There is no cause for it like people try to justify why it happens and I don't believe there is a reason. I've had writers block for a year but it was because I never tried to get out of it. My advice; you still got it in you buddy so just keep trying and remember all the lessons you picked up on along the way and you'll snap out of lickedy split with the right attitude.
Anyways, this is not a bad poem. I actually like but I have trouble expressing myself in a mannor that is 'acceptable' so sorry about that... anyways happy writing-
Hi there! WillowPaw1 here to review!
I have a couple nitpicks for you.
I'm pretty sure there is a comma after "rhythm"?
The "no" before muse should be lowercase.
I know you have already used the word work in the line above, so it won't make any sense to use work again, but "stuff" just isn't a good word, at least from what I learned. It may be hard to think of, but I suggest changing "stuff" to a word entirely different. Poems? Stories? "Stuff" isn't specific enough.
Moving on.
I see poems like this on here, about people relating to their actual work. I think it's a good idea, and to really stated what's wrong in yours. You lost something, but you don't know what. I like it.
I like the use of stanzas here, and they each have their own meaning/plot/idea/whatever.
The first is kind of a summary of the whole thing, or the sadness of the loss, and the second is relating it to friends or others, and the third is actually talking about "it". I like how it's sorted, I think you did a good job on that.
The last thing I have to say is I'm glad the lines and the overall poem don't sound choppy. You don't know how much I dislike that. I know it's some people's style, but still. I like your format and style, not to choppy, but the lines are broken up evenly. Great job.
Sorry for my rambling- but hope thing helps!
WillowPaw1~
I was waiting to see if anybody would pick out the "No" thing that you pointed out. That was a stylistic choice, it was supposed to put some emphasis behind the word "No". And the comma thing is something I need to fix as is the word stuff. Thanks!
Ah, okay, I gotcha there.
And no problem! Glad I could help