Hi defyingravity01,here is Dark to give review on your poem!
Your poem is simple but very enthralling. The way you give expressions are very interesting and pleasing.The theme is maybe simple but the messages is good and nice to digest through my mind.
#"His warm brown eyes,
His shy smile.
The way he holds
My hand in his.'-->However, the rhythm of the poem in the first stanza seems less interesting and odd.
Anyway,This is my favorite stanza;
#As he presses his lips
Against my cheek,
I know he's mine
And I am his.-->So nice and cute^^
The rest is good.But I know you can do more than this.Try use some words that poetic and maybe you should use some metaphor and simile in your poem.I like your poem,keep it up!
Kudos,cheers
~Dark
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