Ask me about myself,
I will tell you why,
I am the way I am.
Why I do the things I do,
They all happened
Because of you.
Ask me why I'm fat.
I ate my sorrows.
Because of your,
Merciless taunting,
And immortal teasing.
Ask me why I have acne.
Because I covered my face,
With makeup that ruined me.
Because you told me
How I badly needed it.
Ask me why I'm poor.
Because my Mother stayed home,
Comforting me through
Sleepless nights instead of
Working the late shift
We so badly needed.
Ask me about paradise,
Though I know of none.
Because you ruined them all,
Without a second thought
With your cruel stinging words.
And your quick, flashing sneers.
Ask me why I hold
My chin up in the air.
Because I made a promise
I would never, ever
Let you see me cry.
Not one, singly, salty tear,
Or the tear of my heart
As it ripped in two.
So I dare you,
Ask me why
I am the way I am.
Why I do the things I do.
They all happened
Because of you.
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When I first saw the title of this essay, my mind immediately went to the abortion issue with your addition of the "Pro Choice" portion. And I was also interested to see what kind of support you could give for being pro choice in this area. I wanted something logically solid. That's not what I got.
The entire argument is based off of emotions. I can't think of a pro-gay argument that's not ever been based off of emotion and relative perspective. Let me explain this according to each paragraph.
This is a right? By whose definition? By one person's definition, marriage is a right that means a man has the choice to marry whatever woman wants to marry him, regardless of the opinions of others. By another's, marriage can be between a human and whatever they choose to love. http://news.bbc.co.uk/cbbcnews/hi/uk/ne ... 844194.stm This is an article about a man who wanted to marry his PS2 that's how much he loved it. So for this man, he could say that marriage is the union of a human and whatever they choose to love. Such a definition would also include bestial marriage, adult-minor marriages, and taken to an extremity forced marriage. If people have "the right to marry whomever they love", then why should a man be prevented from marrying a 6 year old girl he loves? That's absurd, but that's what logic dictates when followed through with completely.
So you're a Mormon now? Or am I thinking of Islam? Again, this goes back to your definition. In some religions, the woman has absolutely no say in the marriage. It's either "I'm your father and you're going to marry this guy" or "I bought you and you belong to me." Those types of religions are illegal in the United States, and yet I hear no complaints about those religions being banned. So you're not really arguing for complete religious freedom here. You're arguing for a particular sect [the LGBT movement is a religious philosophy, if not an all out religion], and haven't proved to me why such a religious philosophy should be allowed. The basic summary of this paragraph is "Christianity is not the true religion and needs to quit telling people how to live." If you're not going to argue logically, don't attack one specific religion. It's unnecessary.
Oh, I love this sentence so much. You have just thrown the situational ethics door wide open. What are our rights? I have the right to enjoy my life on my own property, right? Then what right does the government have to say that they can take my front yard up to my porch to widen a road? Oh...yeah, situational ethics. Such fun stuff. That's just one example. There are many others. A quick Google search of situational ethics scenarios should give you an idea of what I mean.
Um...no, that's not entirely true. And then you took a double-barreled shotgun to both feet in the logic department with this paragraph. Take a breather from the rush of emotions you're getting over this issue and think about this logically for a moment. Gay people get more privileges than straight people. Now for the next quote.
What two straight people are we talking about here? Two straight guys or gals? A pair of the opposite gender? What? And you do realize that a boyfriend and girlfriend can get on the same policy as domestic partners as well as gay people, right?
But what you're also saying is that "gay people don't have to pay as much as straight people who aren't married." So you want them to pay more? You do realize that what you've just said is that there are more privileges to being gay and unmarried than being gay and married, right? So why is there even an argument for gays to get married if it's cheaper when they're not married? My word, logic has gone out the window.
So I hoped and prayed for logic to return. It did not. Instead I received a healthy dose of ranting and unsupported demands.
The exact same thing could be said about child molesters, rapists, murderers, drug addicts, organized crime members, human traffickers, and drug dealers. Whenever you say "you shouldn't prevent someone from being who they are" you've just said that there is no reason to have law enforcement of any kind and that anarchy should reign because there is no right but what is right to each individual person, regardless of how it harms someone else. And your quote of Herb Ritts made me smile because you were supporting the opposition with that one. "Being an American is about having the right to be who you are. Sometimes that doesn't happen." Praise the Lord "sometimes that doesn't happen." I don't want someone breaking into my home and stealing my belongings because that's "right for them." The good old police department is involved in making sure that doesn't happen, and protecting my right to live a safe life. Again, by the same logic you're using I can justify theft, murder, rape, assault, and so on.
Your opening sentence of your last paragraph almost made me laugh, and I hope you can understand why.
No, I have not seen the reasons. By your own logic I have seen no good reasons for believing that gay marriage should be allowed. I am not throwing religion at you. And I'm not saying you believe any of what I said using your logic.
Let me stop and explain what I mean by all of the examples I've used. By your logic and your logic alone those examples can be justified. I did not and am not saying you believe that is right, or that those examples are equal in nature. I also am not saying I believe any of those are right. Nor have I said or am I saying that you must now have a religion. The entirety of my point in all of those examples is that, by your logic, very strange and erroneous conclusions can be drawn. So I wanted logic that actually made some sense. I did not get that. I got one long emotional rant with no logical support at all. This essay is just your opinion put into words. When it's your opinion versus mine, nobody wins. That's not how logical debating works. You need non-subjective facts to argue persuasively, and you did not show me those facts.
With your closing remarks, I was left wondering how you could bash a certain religious group for condemning another group while at the same time doing so yourself. The implication of your questions is that it is bigotry to go on in religious stubbornness or ignorance, and that it is noble to jump on the LGBT bandwagon. "join" is such a positive, jumpy word, and "continue to try to take away the right" makes it sound like such people are persevering in abominable actions akin to the Salem witch trials.
I sincerely hope you can take a step back and objectively examine your beliefs and logic.
Your points are thoughtful and constructive, but you need to tone down the malicious sarcasm. Insulting the writer is counterproductive.
While I do agree with you in that the original argument is based primarily on emotional grounds and therefore doesn't quite stand a harsh logical scrutiny, I think you went a little overboard in some of your comparisons to the point of promoting fallacy. For instance, your comparison of a person who identifies as preferring same-sex relations versus those who have participated in criminal acts is hasty, and clearly a straw man fallacy.
Nor is the LGBT* movement a religious movement. It is a secular movement. Though, now that I look at that paragraph again, it is a bit confounded. The First Amendment, for example, comes from the Constitution, and not the Bill of Rights, for starters...
Thanks guys. Honestly, I used facts and statistics to back this up. This is an emotionally based essay, but honestly... you went overboard. You completely took lines out of my essay and then went off in your own little world and twisted it to something I did not mean to convey. Quite honestly, this was really rude. I appreciate your criticism but I don't appreciate the way you lashed out at me. Thank you for your review, I will not, however, be taking these to heart as it was written out of anger and not logic
The comparison of same-sex marriage to criminal activity was done for the reason that there is a moral code of law written on every person's heart. We know what's right is right, and what's wrong is wrong. Therefore, breaking the moral law in one manner is no different than breaking it in another. Now, by which standards that moral law is established delves into the realm of faith, but the point still stands that if you believe one thing is evil, then you should not believe that another action is "more evil" or "less evil" than one specific action. Evil is evil no matter how much of a degree that evil is manifested. If you want to discuss where my standards come from, then feel free to PM me.
@Snoink First, the Bill of Rights is the first ten amendments to the Constitution. So the Bill of Rights IS the Constitution. Also, please note that there is a difference between a "religion" and a "religious philosophy", which is the distinction I made in the review. A religious philosophy is a way of living and a system of right and wrong. Secularism springs from humanism, which is the "religion of man", or more accurately another religious philosophy. Religious philosophy is defined as "philosophical thinking that is inspired and directed by religion." The LGBT movement is a rebellion against certain organized religions, and most of the arguments are religiously based, thus I called this a religious philosophy.
@defyingravity I would have liked to see your statistics and facts included in the essay. Without those, I'm left will little support for your essay. And this wasn't a lashing out at you, but a rigorous examination of your logic. If it were a lashing out at you, I would have spoken directly to you in the review in a manner such as "You are a complete and total retard to even believe being gay is okay." [such statements are emotionally based and have little to no logic behind them. Just because you believe something different than I do doesn't mean you didn't think through your position] I have heard a broad spectrum of bigotry-inspired rants about this topic directed specifically at people who hold positions opposite "the accepted norm," and I kept such remarks out of my review.
The entire purpose of the review was to examine how well the essay was logically founded. I simply took a step back and examined what the logical conclusion was based on the philosophy you presented in the essay. If you want to discuss this further, again, feel free to PM me.
Hey, KnightTeen of the Green Room Knights here for a review.
As a Christian, I share your point of view on this subject and therefore largely agree with what you have said. However, I also agree with Snoinks' assessment. This is a bit to broad in it's descriptions. You need to make sure that it is very clear that you are talking about same-sex marriage.
You grammar and spelling are very good, but it your next-to-last paragraph you begin with the word, Lastly. Numerical -ly words (firstly, secondly, thirdly, lastly) are to be avoided in essays. At least, this is what my grammar teacher (my mother) pounds into my head ever week.
And your last paragraph isn't really a concluding paragraph. It's more of an authors note. You might want to consider revising it and making it a little longer.
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Thanks
I really appreciate it. I repeated "same sex marriage". Like I said, you were free to interpret this however you chose. No judging 
...you probably shouldn't say "the right to marry whom they love." I know several people who are polyamorous, and they are frustrated in the lack of legal options that are available to them, as polygamy is not allowed. So, really, gay marriage isn't allowing everybody "the right to marry whom they love." It is allowing homosexual marriages to take place.
In any case, everything you've written about can be applied to polygamy, so I think you should be more specific, instead of making those in polyamorous relationships feel awful that they have no options or hope of marriage to those they love at all.
That is a completely different issue altogether.
Yes. Yes to all of this, I am neither American nor Christian but I support gay marriage hugely, you are the first American Christian I have found that also supports it. I like you
Thanks
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lol. Are you angry with me for being Christian and believing in this?
Angry, no. But confused, yes.
Angry, no. But confused, yes.
Lol. Sorry. I have very broad beliefs for a Christian. Is this the only thing that confuses you? I just kinda wanted to put my opinion "out there".
so far I've enjoyed everything you had posted, but not this.
Why have you not enjoyed it? Was it not well written or did you not agree with it? Or do you just not like non-fiction? I'm sorry to dissapoint you.
I just disagree with it.
Okay good. Lol not that you disagree with it but that it isn't badly written
I just don't get how you believe that as a Christian.
I just don't get how you can hate people who've done nothing to you as a Christian.
I would kindly like to say that there is a difference between disagreeing with something and hating it. Those are two incredibly difference actions. I myself do not disagree with homosexuality, although I have numerous friends who identify themselves as gay or lesbian. I have the utmost respect for them, but I do not have to approve their lifestyle. I am tolerant, but that does not mean I have to approve and support it.
*I myself do not agree. whoops haha
Carbon I said I was disagreeing with it. I in no way said I hated the post, or Grav, either. In fact I have enjoyed her other writing.
OK, might have made that sound a little angry. I just think maybe you misunderstood my comments.