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To Those who Have Gone and Will come

by EverLight

Ancient souls of the past,

Noble and true 

Foolish and false,

You have shaped our future.

You have lit our ways.

Dying for a cause

Oh Men of the past

Many are the trials you have endured,

Many are your dreams,

Dreams of glory

Dreams of power,

But gone you are fading away like shadows gone but never forgotten.

Souls of the future

Remember the mistakes of the past

May those gone guide you

Learn from what they have done.

Least days to come fall into darkness.

A distant shadow of good times.

Whose voice is whispered in the wind,

Pay attention be careful,

least the sky come falling down.

Whose times will come streching across the sky 

into eternity.

Souls of now be good

Remember the days of old,

Watch your ways 

For you can change the future by every little thing you say and do.

Never forget it is us who will one day shape the world to come,

Shape it well.


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Thu Apr 05, 2018 6:05 pm
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SnowMonkey wrote a review...

What line stands out to you the most?

"But gone you are fading away like shadows gone but never forgotten."

This first made me think of historical figures, famous people from the past who were never forgotten for their heroic deeds, but then I got to thinking about other people of the past. Little take the time to learn about their own family, who though may have not become famous historically, did still shape the world in a small way, very much like you mention in this line "For you can change the future by every little thing you say and do."

We shouldn't forgot the smaller heroes of history, even our own grandparents.

What feeling are you left with after finishing this piece?

Well I first left feeling impressed. It's a very good poem that I enjoyed quite a lot.
But I am also left feeling quite thoughtful, which like over mentioned to others, is a very good state to leave your reader in.
You don't always have to inform the reader of something, tell them something they don't already know. But having them just think about the poem after reading it, give them knew ideas and inspiration, is really a great accomplishment.
I must admit, countless times Ive read a poem and immediately forgot about it, the words having went right past my brain. But this poem I thoroughly enjoyed and it really got the gears in my brain going.

If you could ask the author one question what would it be?
What inspired you to write this poem?
How is this poem so beautiful/awesome/well written/amazing?

Any further coments or suggestions?

I would just suggest to leave out the punctuation at the end of the lines, it isn't essential in poetry and I personally just found it distracting but I also read really fast and I don't like any thing that makes me read any slower Of course this is completely up to you and how you want your poem read, there's definitely nothing wrong with punctuation. I just find it reads smoother without periods and commas and that this poem really works to have the reader go at their own speed. But if there is a specific pace you want your reader to read at, different times you specifically want them to pause, then punctuate away. The poem works both ways really. (Extra points for that)

Overall I really loved the poem. I can't wait to read some more of your works. :)

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Wed Apr 04, 2018 4:49 am
Radrook wrote a review...

Radrook here a once again
to offer some suggestions.
Apologies if i offend.
It isn’t my intention.

Please feel full free to cast aside
all things you deem not helpful.
But if you do be sure its true
by being extra careful.

That having been said:

I like the way that this poem focuses on a very important truth, our actions shape the present and the future in ways in which we might fail to appreciate. Even the smallest thing such as a smile or a scowl can have strong influences far beyond what we can imagine by goading someone over the edge of deep depression into suicide, or being the proverbial straw that breaks the camel’s back and incites some violent reaction against others. In short, we can either provide hope or generate despair by the seemingly small things that we so or fail to do. We can either add to the dark, dismal atmosphere or brighten the gloom a little and prevent the darkness from being as deep as it would otherwise be.

As the poem points out, people of the past have all added their influences to create the worlds they did and those that followed.Who knows how many geniuses would have been born had Hitler not instigated the holocaust or how many wonderful persons would be alive today if Vlad the Impaler had not impaled all those people. We will never know because men of the past decided to add to the darkness and determine who would and who would not exist.

The poem points this out very well.

Looking forward to reading more of your work.


I would be careful with the phrase "Men of the past" because it might be interpreted as male chavanism.

You know what the big problem is in telling fantasy and reality apart? They're both ridiculous.
— The 12th Doctor