Wow. I'm such a sucker for shorter poems that can convey such deep emotion. This is such a great example of that. I especially love the line: "If I could heal your every scar I would / But not one taught me how." I couldn't tell you how many times I have personally felt like that.
I think this poem comes from a place of deep pain and understanding of others' pain. If you as a writer keep digging into that understanding, I have no doubt that your pieces will be amazing.
The only edit I would suggest is if you're going to have some punctuation in your poem, make sure you have punctuation throughout. I know it's tiresome to do so, but you'll have a much more cohesive piece if you do.
Thank you for sharing your talent and art with us! Please continue to!
All love,
Lilith
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