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Stranger In The Stars

by EverLight

Dear stranger in the stars,

You're name is written on my heart, and soul

And I will always remember you even when I die

Dear stranger in the stars,

You may not know me, but I've watched you

As you sought to avenge the universe,

As you set a quest for knowledge eternal

And you may not know this

but I have too, have sacrificed for the stars

and I too, have sought the wisdom of the cosmos

Dear stranger in the stars

I hope you're name will ever be whispered in the stars

And I hope my love shall walk beside you, whereever you are. 

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Sun Nov 17, 2019 4:58 am
KatjaDawn wrote a review...

Hey EverLight! Katja here to review your poem. As always please feel free to disregard any comments or suggestions I make if you find them unhelpful. That being said, let's get into this review~

Overall Thoughts

I really enjoyed reading this poem which tells of a love for someone who has done a great good in the eyes of the narrator. The narrator wishes this person to feel their love despite never having met them. Very fantasy-like poem with a superhero-admirer feel to it~


I suggest breaking the poem into stanzas at the repetition of "Dear stranger in the stars"

but I have too, have sacrificed for the stars

Here, you can remove "have" altogether or reword it as "I have also sacrificed for the stars"


This should be "wherever"

That's all I Have for suggestions!


Your poem is very nicely done and the narrative itself reminds me of a movie or just overall fantasy story where a superhero's deeds draws admiration and the admirer wrote this poem for the superhero- if that makes sense. I think it's very cute and poetic for sure. I especially like the final line where the narrator hopes for their love to be with the person they admire. Well done! :)

I hope my review was helpful,

Keep Writing,


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Fri Nov 15, 2019 2:57 pm
Raelyn says...

i am gonna come back and review but this is amazing everlight.

EverLight says...

Thank you. (;

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Thu Nov 14, 2019 2:46 pm
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LadyGemstone says...

This is amazing, I will review it later. Keep writing.

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Thu Nov 14, 2019 1:42 pm
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Softballgirl333 wrote a review...

Hello Again Everlight!


- My First Suggestion is to try and break the poem up a little bit, I know it's a shorter poem, but I think it would help the flow a bit better if you broke up the pom into a new stanza each time you say "Dear Stranger in the Start"

- Secondly, for the very last line "And I hope my love shall walk beside you, whereever you are." I would suggest taking out the ",wherever you are" and move it down to its own line for a more powerful ending. Formatting is a very personal preference when it comes to poetry, but I believe your poem could benefit from this.

-Third, In the line "You're name is written on my heart, and soul" the comma before "and soul" is unnecessary and doesn't quite make sense, and in my opinion, makes it block-y with that pause.

-Fourth, in the line "And I will always remember you even when I die" I would take out the "And" at the very beginning because the line line before say "and soul" so "and soul, And" is just repetitive, and I feel like the meaning would be more powerful with just the plain "I will always remember you even when I die."

I really enjoy this poem and the meaning behind it, seeing other comments shows that it i about someone and I think that's beautiful. You have real talent for making your poems and other works flow-y and it's really nice.

As always, you can keep what you want and change what you want, but this poem is fantastic.

Happy Writing,

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Thu Nov 14, 2019 3:03 am
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redvictory wrote a review...

This is stunning! The imagery is absolutely gorgeous. I have a few grammar things, but that's it! First of all, a common mistake: you used the wrong form of your/you're. Both uses of "you're" should be the possessive "your." Common mistake! Also, "whereever" is mispelled: it should be "wherever.
But those are really little things! I'm a sucker for space/sky imagery. This is just lovely. :) Keep writing!

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Wed Nov 13, 2019 10:57 pm
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Miraculor77 wrote a review...

Hi EverLight!

I'm going to warn you right here: This review might suck. This is (I think) my first time reviewing a poem, so please comment and tell me if you found it helpful in any way.
To start, I really like this poem. I feel it has an unrealistic, almost fantasy element, if taken literally. But most poems aren't, so this could be about someone you may have known in real life, for all I know.

I just found some nitpicks that I wanted to point out.

You capitalized all of the lines except for these:

but I have too, have sacrificed for the stars

and I too, have sought the wisdom of the cosmos

It makes the poem look a bit uneven. Was that your intention?

I also noticed that you used "you're" instead of "your" twice in the poem. "You're" means you+are, and "your" is the possessive form of "you."

You also missed a comma after the second "dear stranger in the stars."

And I hope my love shall walk beside you, whereever you are.

Whoa, that's an amazing last line.
I like how you put a period at the end; it makes the line look a lot more final.

"Whereever" is not a word. The proper spelling would be "wherever." I'm pretty sure that the older-English word used to be "where-ever," which is an option if you want to give the poem a more old-fashioned feeling.

Feel free to ignore my suggestions if you think they're not useful. These are just my thoughts, but in the end, it's still your poem. :)

Overall, I really liked it. The words painted a strange picture in my mind, one with dark blue swirls, glittering stars, and one lone figure walking on a dark gray plain.

I hope this review was at least a little helpful, and as always...

Keep writing
- Mira

EverLight says...

Thank you (:

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Wed Nov 13, 2019 10:30 pm
EverLight says...

@Raelyn if you're reading this, you may guess this poems alternate meaning-DO NOT REVEAL IT.

Raelyn says...


EverLight says...

Do not go calling me girly. But thank you.

StarLord says...

oh i know the meaning of this alright.

EverLight says...

*Gives Loki-like half-grin.

According to all known laws of aviation, there is no way a bee should be able to fly. Its wings are too small to get its fat little body off the ground.
— The Bee Movie