Mystery of Life-NaPow 5

Hey, Lee's here for a review!
Starting off with the minus parts of the poem, alright? I mean, the parts that I don't like. Others may like them, of course!
I like the way you have written it, like... Uhhh.... An hourglass? I don't know what it's called, but that is what immediately caught my eye.

This is a very deep topic. Many venture into it, but not all understand them... May I know what inspired you to write this poem?

I just love the wording, how you have woven them together to create this image of the world, of God, of Thought, and so much more.

Okay, then! I'll start stating the things I don't like about the poem. They're all very small, but all together, they are rather disconcerting.

Third line: an extra space, and two unnecessary commas. I mean, I know the space might just be a typing error, but the commas, while not deemed useless, aren't necessarily adding to the virtues of the poem.

I really think despite the whole hourglass thing, you should write in stanzas. It's very confusing, suddenly stopping and then starting a whole new topic. It fragments the entire thing... But maybe you meant to do that?

I find that in the second half, there are just far too many question marks. I mean, again, it's not something that destroys the poem, but it is a tad bit strange. I don't know, it's just weird. And you needn't change the whole piece, just make those lines statements.
There should be a "the" before universe.

In the seventeenth line, it should be "lie", not "lay".

Well, that's it. I hope I wasn't very critical of your work - I really liked it.
See you around !
Little

I like how the narrative works by contrasting opposites or the mediocre (ordinary life) with the almighty (time). The search for the meaning of life is one of the basic questions of ordinary discussion and philosophy. The question is raised here in much the same way as usual, from a top down approach where the cynicism and world-weariness have caused the poet to take a step back and observe." Is life more than the sum of it parts?" " Guess we will never know" is the answer we got from you.
The first problem with this is easily solved - that of correct spelling. You replaced "than" with "then" twice ( lines 6 and 11). Then it should be reminisce in line 18. ( Reminiscence is the noun, reminisce is its verb.) Then "waist" should be replaced by waste, and breaths with breathes.
Then there is the problem of a jarring narrative. Even though I agree that poetry is more free than prose, and free verse is cool, you must always have the effect on readers you want to have, invoke the feelings you wish them to have, through what you write. When you need to make a sudden, big contrast or change, then the occasional line-break is ok. However otherwise, line breaks in between phrases (3-4 , 14-15) drew my attention away from what you were trying to say, for a moment. The same tendency is reflected in the 4th last line, where you bring God into the poem just before the poem is about to end, with no explanation or reference to previous line. If God breathes meaning into life, how does she do it? I cannot tell. You don't have to specify explicitly, just point in the general direction you think God works. Does he calm the raging storms, restore the crushed spirits? We have no clue from the work itself. The same with the last line, why you think we can't answer the question " what is the meaning of life" is never told, nor hinted at. You get the point.

All in all, I think you have potential in picking the right elements that work together, you just need to put more effort into seeing how everything comes together to flow as a whole.