Good (insert greeting based on your time)!
I came across this poem a while back I really enjoyed it! I never got around to reviewing it, but I’m super glade I found it again!
What got me hooked last time, and what drew me back in this time, was your style. I love the choppy way in which you present your poem. It almost feels like we as the readers are bouncing around inside of the writer’s head, with short incoherent thoughts paired with drawn out solid sentences. Not only was your style one of a kind, but your imagery was flawless.
I am not the most experienced poet, and certainly not the best, and it’s entirely possible I missed something. But from my point of view, I saw very little grammar mistakes. Only thing I noticed: It’s really small, but on line twelve, the parentheses begin for only one word before jumping down to the next line. It’s entirely possible you did this for some sort of artistic reason, and if so, please feel free to ignore this.
All in all, your poem was absolutely amazing! I hope to see more of your work around soon! Stay safe and keep writing!
-Lizzy
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