Requiem of an Immortal Soul

Hi hi, pandabear7 is here to do a lovely review.
Woah, so much imagery if I might say.
That is brilliant. I love just being able to picture what I'm reading in my head.
I don't see any grammar problems, well except for if unwonted was suppose to be unwanted** but I don't know if that's what you meant. Other than that, it is a great poem! Keep it going!!

-panda

Hey tgirly!
I'm hanorah and ill be reviewing your poem today!

I enjoyed reading this poem, it was really good It was very descriptive, and had lots of images in the poem, nice job!

It was full of emotion, and a tad morbid but I liked it you made it clear yet almost a mystery about what this poem is about, if you know what I mean? (That sounded a bit stupid but I can't explain it)
~Keep writing

Oooooh delightful!

I loved reading this poem, as it triggered so much emotion inside! I love how you kept it imple and comprehensible. By the way, you had some brilliant lines in the poem. E.g.:

"Memories dripped from her lashes,

She clung to him with seaweed fingers,"

they were such creative lines!

Well done

Whatsup! Im new to this site, but imma try my hand at a review for ya.

I like the way that this poem is executed, and I like your descriptions of the girl, especially your use of the color blue and the words "cool" and "cold. I interpreted this as a young man trying to bring a deceased lover back to life, but having to come to grips with the fact that she is indeed dead. I like the way you use a sea as a metaphor for time. It's almost like the guy will get pulled into his own death if he keeps living in the past. My only qualms with this lay in the word choice. Your adjectives and "tone words" are very very well chosen, but I feel like the narrative aspect may need some touching up, especially in the first two stanzas. Hope i could help you out! Hmu for any more reviews.

Hey there TGirly! I'm fairly new here, but I'm going to give this a go.

I enjoyed this poem very much, it was very clear and full of emotion. It was a bit difficult to follow on a first read-through, but the second made things much more clear. At times, it would seem choppy, and others it seemed to flow seamlessly. The imagery is great, and the overall idea comes across very strong. Definitely good stuff!

Hey,

Umaima here, Your poem was just marvelous. I loved it, like loved it with an extra wow'. Just so beautiful, I felt the emotions that you were trying to show and nothing more than 'beautiful can describe it.

There was formatting error but else than that the poem was just so good. Here's what I loved the most:

"She closed her eyes and slipped into the past.

He found her hand,

Tried to pull her back.

She gasped for a breath unwonted,

He held her close,

But she wasn’t ready.

She sank back down."