Hello tgirly!
The rhyming was a little inconsistent, but to me, that can be good or bad. I liked it in this poem. It was odd and a little bit off, which I (personally) think carried the theme well.
I liked the ending a lot, but I feel like it could have been worded a bit better.
I liked “life's an act and I've lost my script,” a LOT. It’s probably my favorite line in the poem. However, I did have a bit of a problem with how it fit with the line before it. It’s seemed almost tacked on to the end of the previous sentence and could have flowed better.
Overall, it was clever and enjoyable. Your brief description got me curious and brought me in. Lovely job.
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