PeanutPhoebe, here to review!! Great job on this short poem. I really like short poems if they're written well. You did well with your choice of words. This is a little bit choppy, tho... Some of the transitions just need to flow better. This is pretty good, but could use some improvement. You're doing a great job on all of your poems, though. Keep up the good work!!
PeanutPhoebe
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