Hey Katnes,
Shady here with a review for your lovely little NaPo poem! A bit of a disclaimer before I begin, I am not overly experienced with poetry. I've written a bit and read a bit more, but if someone on here disagrees with what I say, you probably want to go with them. Nonetheless, I can point out things I like and things I don't like as a novice poet myself.
I must say, though, that I enjoyed this poem. I think it does a good job of conveying of complicated inner emotions that people outside will never be able to see much less understand. I also like how you started with more physical descriptors with the robe and the sandals and the crown, but then shift it more towards an emotional feeling.
I think it's good because it starts out tangible making it easier to grasp, but then changes over to what the substance of the poem is about -- secrets, desires, the inner essence of a person.
Keep writing!
~Shady
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