"Fingers crawling, carving
Names of long lost lovers
Into pale porcelain."
I love the imagery that this brings to mind, dark and gloomy, memories of the past that come back to haunt you. The poem has a foreboding feel, yet, it's not overpowering, which is why I like it. The only criticism I have is regarding the line, "Shimmering with emotions past." It doesn't seem to flow with the rest of the poem, which has the dark, black aura. The word shimmering makes me think of brightness and light, to much of it. It seems out of place, since the emotions are supposed to be coming from the past.
Just a suggestion, but switching the word with glinting or glimmer or something that is more, temporary, would tie it all together. But, it's a really good poem.
Thank you Forestqueen808
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