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i really admired you piece it was great, i felt as though the water was flowing beneath my feet.
awesome imagery, and your words are well breath taking also the feeling i got by just reading made it worth reading..
keep up writting and never stop
really looking forward to reading more of you work.
I really loved this piece. It has great emotion and flow. However the fourth stanza sounds a little off to me. The line"with your heart intact" seemed a little out of place. I would suggest that you consider re-wording or changing that line. Otherwise it's pretty perfect.