Why does my heart ache?
Why do I wait all day,
Only to back out?
Why can't I free my feelings,
From their cage?
Every day, I see you,
And can almost get the words out.
Almost, just almost.
I can never get the words out completely.
And every time I think of it, my heart aches
But I know I have to tell you,
Or else you'll have moved on.
You won't want me anymore.
You'll want someone else.
I have to tell you.
It will be too late.
I have to tell you.
I have to let my feelings fly.
I have to get the words out.
It will be too late.
Why can't I free my feelings,
From their cage?
I can almost get the words out,
Almost, just almost.
You won't want me anymore.
It will be too late.
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Hello, Forestqueen! Tassen Spellbinder here to review your work! Let's jump right in!
"Why do I wait all day,
Only to back out?"
-- I don't think you need the comma after day.
"Why can't I free my feelings,
From their cage?"
-- Again, I perceive an unnecessary comma.
"Almost, just almost.
I can never get the words out completely."
-- I think you could replace the period after almost with a -.
"And every time I think of it, my heart aches"
-First, this needs a period. Also, I would remove the and.
"It will be too late.
I have to tell you.
I have to let my feelings fly.
I have to get the words out.
It will be too late."
-- A suggestion: Make the fourth line the same as the first- that way, you would have some really interesting symmetry here expressing the doubts and changing mind of the author.
"Why can't I free my feelings,
From their cage?"
-- Again, unnecessary comma.
All in all, I like this poem. Keep writing!