He Fell

Hey! I'm just reviewing your work like crazy!! XP Hopefully you get something out of it. XD

So I'm just gonna go ahead and shoot a review. I think that you have a great sort of interplay here and even without descriptive or extra words you still managed to do a really good job portraying the situation and how two people would react in such a situation.

I found the beginning very interesting because it seems like the two of them are in the same situation and I had originally thought the second person (the good guy) also had something to do with the incident. But then as the conversation continued it revealed a kind of interesting twist in just a matter of words. Which is really amazing. And then by the end everyone knows that the non-italicized person is the person who pushed the other person causing them to die.

I don't know why but without any names or anything I thought that this was kind of a high school arena and that they were on a rooftop and then someone pushed someone and they fell, because they were pushed. So I just wanted to say that this writing is creatively awesome because of the way you wrote it without any characteristics or any background, just a conversation. It allows the reader to sort of make up the background and it certainly adds to the suspense of it all.

Overall I thought this was pretty cool to see and it definitely broadened my view of works and writing styles that I think that people would be fascinated to see. It was interesting and it was very simple, sometimes writing just needs to be simple, especially since it's the basis for someone's mind, writing isn't necessarily painting the picture, it's telling the story. So I thought that this was a good example of unique works, and I love it! XD

Great work!

--Keep dreaming and keep writing!

Funny! This reminds me of something I wrote a while back between two criminals. I chose to take a more in-depth conversation to move the story along, but this was short and sweet.

Except that it was too short. Just as things were starting to get interesting, it was over. I'd like to see a little more tension in this. I'd like a little more fight between the criminals. I don't know if you've ever been a criminal, but I know a few, and they're a little less accepting about this situation. Criminals think on their feet, the corroborate stories and make sure both know the ins and outs of their alibis. They don't just go, "Well, let's just say he fell," because the next question will be, "How did he fall?" and that's when the alibi fails.

Yeah, more fight between the criminals. But the ending is perfect, keep that. It's awesome.

I'd love to see this expanded and reworked! Please do so!

KF

Wow, that was really good. I couldn't stop reading watch for that last line you forgot a quotation mark, but that's the only grammar problem I saw. I really enjoyed reading this piece, and I hope to read more pieces like this. Keep on writing!!

This is so indicative of human nature; isn't that how it always works out. The only way to keep a secret between 3 people, is if two of them are dead. But otherwise, it was short and entertaining and I just rambled on about nothing..... so...... keep up the good work? Keep Writing!

This is a wonderful piece of dialogue, it was very intriguing and I enjoy the whole;
He fell,
No you pushed him.

Quite good, and the flow was nicely done. I like this because you can see that you've thought it through or perhaps it was a bout of inspiration. I'm having a hard time explaining this, sheesh. XDD

Overall, I enjoyed it and it was well done. Continue writting my friend, this dialogue skill will come in very much handy.

~Writteninstone.

This is great, I think it would work well as a skit, it's very funny. I liked it.