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My reviewing skills are limited, my friend. I can only give you a review purely based on impression.
I clicked on this poem because of the title. It drew me in for reason. Once I read it, I immediately became glad that I chose it. It was beautiful to me. It struck home with me. Especially the ending four phrases. They just seemed real to me. That is what poetry is about to me, I suppose. Reality. The telling of the truth. I feel as though you told me the truth and it was wonderful. Thank you. Keep me posted. Happy Writing!
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!
I LOVE this line, bu I don't under stand what "Our leader is hard" means?
And I had a tinny misunderstanding with this line "They hear hate". I love the context used here, but I think tey hear ignorance more so. But the poem is legend!
I loved those lines the most.
Sigh, I love being a freak, though. haha
Excellent work
This is what I'd like to call RAW poetry.
* This part is probably the most true and powerful part of the poem. As much as people don't want to admit, that's exactly what's going on, lol. So don't expect too much of a warm welcome to this poem from others on here.
It speaks truth and tells how life really is, despite political correctness and what human wish it could be/ pretend that it actually is. It's great. you did a very good job.
I'll do a more detail review later, but I have schoolwork and the treadmill to attend to for now.
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-Jojo
All Christians, please do not assault me, but I have to say that although I understand what you're trying to say, I still find the lines:
"Our guide is unkown to them;
They call the emotion fake,
Temporary,
Nonexistent.
Our leader is hard;
They are afraid.
Our command,
Our mission,
They despise.
They hear hate-
We know love."
a bit offensive, being Jewish (not a religious Jew, but non the less)
I know you have good intentions, and I appreciate your devotion, but I would like to suggest a little thought next time, because it still is a little uncomfortable, even though I know you meant only the best.
Aside from that it's a lovely poem, that in my opinion shows a lot of the pretty sides in Christianity.
Hmm, well its a bit of a cliche, the use of words and how you used them. I like the idea behind them though.
favorite line, very creative.
Wonderful poem!
Real Christians are freaks of society, as they go against what is "normal."
In the words of tobymac's Jesus Freak song:
What will people do when they hear that I'm a Jesus Freak?
What will people say when they find out it's true?
I don't really care if they label me a Jesus Freak,
There ain't no disguising the truth!
You expressed this pretty well.
My only nitpick:
That's all. Great work!