Young Writers Society

Ok, this time I LOVE the formatting.
It really helps with the expression.
To start with, I thought this work was going to be really depressing, however, after reading it, I have changed my mind.

'I write to find

peace

reason

comfort

happiness. ' - The way this is presented makes it look like a ladder of thought, each rung giving different meaning, which is really clever.

I love the rest of the formatting too, kind of organised chaos, reminds me of a fountain actually (a fountain of thought) XD

'blinding,

spinning,

dancing,

screaming,

hissing,

pouncing,

plotting,

mocking'

All of these words make a really good leap into action for the piece and prevent it from becoming TOO thoughtful.

Overall, I can't criticise. Nope... XD

Well done.

I really love your description in this piece. I think it captures/communicates what your trying to convey really nicely. This is what writers block feels like for me, essentially. The last stanza is really well written (it's descriptive and concise). I'm sure there is a particular reason you chose the words you've lined up in the binding-mocking section, although it's not exactly clear. I don't understand why you've created this strange poetic structure, but it isn't so obtrusive and I assume the point is to mock or resemble the disjointed thoughts, which swim around one's head during a "Writer's Depression." The repetition of the word "word" really makes me really think about the importance of them to us as writers. I'm babbling now, I liked it. Thanks!

Hi Cailey! Niteowl here to bring you a little Christmas in July cheer!

Now, writer's block is a pretty common subject to write about. That said, I like what you've done with it here. The format is odd, but it works. There's also some really good lines, like

Lost in a sea of spoiled ink

and wrinkled paper.

The format of this is crazy, but I feel lime it matched the whole feeling of Writee's Block. Recently, I've been feeling depressed because I don't think my work is good enough. I think this poem displays something that most of us writers can relate to, especially myself. Your use of imagery here was astounding, and you sure do have a grip of figurative language. The way that this is written is relatable, yet catchy at the same time and it really adds to the novelty of the piece.

This is a surprisingly accurate take on the one thing that has troubled everyone here at some point it their literary writing career. (And to anyone who is reading this and thinking, 'That's never happened to me,' then my friend you are either a liar or entirely new to this world and you will experience it soon enough. Not to be vulgar, but it is rather like girls and their 'monthly visitors'. It's going to happen to you sooner or later, and I guarantee that you will not enjoy it.)

I can truly find no real fault with this, and indeed you are an excellent writer.

The only thing that bothers me, and this is a personal opinion and therefore it is to your leisure to take into consideration, is the fact that the words are, quite literally, all over the page. Now, this may have been your intention, and truth be told there is nothing really wrong with such placement.

However, I found it rather hard to read in the form that it is. I had to keep jumping around, and several times I found myself looking back and realizing that I had missed a sentence simply because it was on the other side of my screen. It works as it is, that fact I will not deny, but I believe that it would be easier to read if it were all in the same grouping.

This is an opinion and it is your decision whether or not to take it into consideration. I enjoyed this piece and hope to read more of your works in the future.

Happy Writing!
HT

This poem is great, it really captures the feeling of writers block. I am curious as to why you close to arrange the lines like so. It certainly does make it interesting, maybe a little surprising.
I like your final eight lines a lot, they were the ones I could most connect to.
In the part where you say "words cannot bring joy" I feel like you should move it back into the middle of onto the other side, it is easy to miss. Also that sentence is almost contradictory to all of the rest of your poem. You say about how much you miss it and create a sense that words do bring joy as you plead to them to come back so I feel like saying that is a bit out of place.

Good job, I like it, it seems that if you do have any writers block it may be fading