Ok, this time I LOVE the formatting.
It really helps with the expression.
To start with, I thought this work was going to be really depressing, however, after reading it, I have changed my mind.
'I write to find
peace
reason
comfort
happiness. ' - The way this is presented makes it look like a ladder of thought, each rung giving different meaning, which is really clever.
I love the rest of the formatting too, kind of organised chaos, reminds me of a fountain actually (a fountain of thought) XD
'blinding,
spinning,
dancing,
screaming,
hissing,
pouncing,
plotting,
mocking'
All of these words make a really good leap into action for the piece and prevent it from becoming TOO thoughtful.
Overall, I can't criticise. Nope... XD
Well done.
Points: 240
Reviews: 530
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