Young Writers Society

Hello there!
Vagrant here for a short review!

The first word that pops in my head after reading this is - sweet!
The poem has a very calming and sweet effect on me. I like how you, in a very concise manner, said everything you had to and also proved your love for your partner.
When you love someone truly, indeed even the mere sound of their heartbeat is enough to comfort us after a tiring day.

I find the read very heartwarming and cute.
Great work, keep up the swag!
Cheers!

Woow, this is so cute

As crazy as it might sound reading it reminded me of John Donne's the sun rising.
The imagery I got when reading this was so vivid and lit. That is another reason I love this work; ever word in there made it easy for me to create a mental picture of what you wrote.

"If this is not Love
then Heaven may yet surprise me,
for nothing on Earth compares."

This line made my heart flutter and makes me want to fall in love. hahaaa lol.
You slayed it buddy.
I'm looking forward to reading more pieces like this from you.
Good job

AWW cute

Hello Shauzer!

This is such a cute little poem. Even though it is short I think it caught the attention I deserved. And it is true for people who are in love to feel this way toward one another. I love the line were you said "then Heaven may yet surprise me". It adds a very nice flow of touch to it. And when you added "for nothing on Earth compares". It really made that line true.

Thank you so much for the read, and I hope to see more!

Sincerely
Anma

Hi, this is Aafrin. I really like your poem on love. It just beautifully worded. I like the way you use the word heartbeat in your poem. It's just mindblowing. Just keep it up!

Hey, there! This is a nicely written piece. I like how you've focused on the heartbeat to symbolize love rather than dwelling on physical features. Using the heartbeat shows that there is a deep emotional connection between the lovers. I can agree with what has been written below that your capitalization of "Love" is very nice, as it indicates a proper noun, something specific. I notice, though, that although you have also capitalized the proper noun "Earth," you did not capitalize "heaven." However, both are places, so both are proper nouns. I would advise capitalizing either both or neither of them, just to keep uniformity.

You're a talented writer, and you create beautiful work. Keep it up!

Good morning!

This is a really sweet piece that I just adored. It encompasses that innocent perspective of romantic love, how pure it can be simply by being close to that special someone. There is nothing more than a reflection of life's simplest blessings being described here.

Your imagery is spot on. You've got a strong sense of vocabulary, being able to draw me in with such few words. The way you describe the scene effectively portrays the emotion well enough that I can personally feel what the speaker is feeling. That comfort and safety you feel in such a moment was expressed rather well!

I found it intriguing that you capitalized "Love" in this piece, bringing a little more emphasis to the word upon reading it silently. But the way this leads into the final couple of lines, or basically that entire sentence as a whole, was profoundly beautiful and really wraps up the theme nicely.

I very much enjoyed this piece. Well done!

Jabber, the One and Only!

wow, the imagery here is mind-blowing. I really love this poem because it really warms my helpless romantic heart. I really liked the line: then heaven may yet surprise me,
for nothing on Earth compares. because it has this comparison on how of the earth to heaven, at least what I got at. And I like the ending because it really shows how amazing the thing you are feeling is. I really feel like I am connected to the author and their emotions here. Yes, this is definitely a sweet and short poem. I wouldn't change anything about the length. Usually, I am a person that likes to read a poem with a lot more length, but you made the short length just as impactful. You have a lot of talent and I will be on the lookout for more of your pieces.

Now for a couple of critics. this is all to be helpful and not a personal attack in any way. I truly do like this piece:

"of all the day’s bites." This line had me a little confused an what you were saying.

Also, the punction was a little confusing to me. What made you chose to format it this way?

GREAT JOB

Yours truly,

Rae:)

Hi, this is Aari. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. I think it is such a sweet and short poem, and it captures such a pure moment and feeling. "If this is not love then heaven may yet surprise me, for nothing on Earth compares" -- Wow. Just reading this makes me want to feel what the writer is feeling. It's a beautiful work of art, and I wouldn't change anything.

Thank you. Keep writing and keep sharing.