Flower Girl

Your poem caught my eye because my user name and the name of your poem hehe. In any case this is sweet relief to me. I've been on here for the past few days and this is the first poem I've liked.

The only comment I have is that the last line is worded a bit strange.

i really liked this poem! i loved how it makes you feel like your there as well as conveying the actual story behind it. the happiness and sadness combined really makes this beautiful. one other thing i also liked was the somewhat personification of the lady bugs to make them major characters too. great job!

Hey that wa creepy and sad and very beautiful. I'm not much of a writer but I like the emotion in it. I feel you could add more sentences. Tell more about here dieing. But besides that very great. Also keep writing poems like this and make us feel more emotion.

Hello there. I don't know how I'm going to review this poem without saying anything the others have already said.
Okay.
So, I've decided I'll just tell you how awesome I think it is

The best thing about this poem is the ambiguity of it all. Nothing is obvious, and that is a beautiful thing to see since it allows room for various interpretations of the poem. I think that you were trying to create some sort of ironic parallel between an actual flower girl - as in one at a wedding - and a girl who may have been a flower girl once, but is now using flowers in another sort of ceremony which may be, as others have speculated, death. My question is, is it her (the flower girl's) death? I'm not so sure.

It is a sombre poem...underneath the superficial layer of ladybugs and flowers there is a darkness that you hint at in lines like: "Flower stems get ripped in half / the girl weaves them into a casket." You're a rather talented poet.

Overall, I think this is a beautiful piece. Great job.
p.s. I love your name, Nargles

In the last stanza, I think you need a comma.

This is a creative poem, but it makes me sad. Why did the flower girl die? Or, did she even die?

I like your poem, I just don't understand it's true meaning, even though it's right in front of me.

I see you were trying to make this a friendly poem. Like one for a child. It worked, it worked.
The poem is sweet, short and very effective. People have already pointed this out, sorry! So, the flower girl is really a dying person? That's what I get from this. It's hard to tell because the poem is the size that it is. That makes it exciting for me. Not being sure about something about a poem or story is something I like to come across while I'm reading works by others. Great poem, and keep up the great work!
~Dark.

Upon first reading this, I felt as though it was going to be a bit babyish. The second stanza uses passive voice, which is usually a total turn of for me, but it actually fits well into the folly, light-hearted tone of the poem. I also quite appreciate the subtle grimness that lingers in the lines of the poem. It reads well, and leaves the mind curious about what exactly is going on.

PS: The idea of the currents of the stream voyaging a woven casket remind me a lot of the biblical story of Moses. Good work.

This is a very sweet poem. It is short and effective. I like how it gets the theme across clearly and stays true to its mood and style. The final stanza leaves me wondering if this is a sad poem. I think in the final line you need some punctuation just to phrase the line more clearly. Also instead of a comma at the end of many of your lines, a semicolon would also work.