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ok, so i had to read this a few times before anything. Sorry for any misspellings or anything. im on a sugar high right now haha. Kinda got to read things twice just to understand anything.I really like how you placed all your words, I think that was really neat. Not sure if you meant to or not, but capitalizing the beginning of each verse. Not sure if wanted to do that or not. I really like the way its written. I mean their isn't much to nip pick at to me. Besides the small things that other people have all ready said. One more thing i would like to say is i really loved how you ended this>
"maybe this is what I'd say if asked how to explain forever:
it starts over again
every time you open your eyes."
That last bit kinda hits you pretty hard and makes this sound amazing. I really enjoyed this! I personally think it is really good peace and interesting. Sorry its not much of a review!

Hey there Kat here to review for you.

Well done, I really liked the way you used the words to creat an actual vizual on the paper, something I have never benn very good at . Kind of like falling into infinity .... it was nice how you combined everything into infinity and I particularly liked how you used the symbol for the title instead of the word.........

Not much of a review sorry !

Kat

I found this interesting. I must say, I wasn't too fond of the odd spacing of the stanzas in the piece. Other than that, though, this appears to have the make up of some pretty solid poetry. You appear to have gotten the abstract thought concept just right on this, and I must say, I am impressed. I definitely enjoyed it. Let's simply leave this with a pun. I hope you continue to write poems to INFINITY.

(Ba-dum-crash!)

Hey Nunya here! I really like this poem. I think it's clever. Let's take this step by step. Shall we? >.>
Stanza 1,2,3,4,5: Hmmmm...you sure that's a complete thought? Nope. Change that to something like this:

There might be a reason repetition is so powerful,
Why we love it so much.
Maybe,
It's because billions of atoms float around us,
Each with a particular structure.

Doesn't that look better?
Stanza 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15: Don't start the beginning of your staza with and just say simply:

Memory is a pattern--
A perfectly balanced recognizing.
The perfect coordination that is:
You,
Me,
The pen on that desk,
That blade of grass,
Every footstep,
Every smile,
Every single turn of the head.

That way people see that this a single flow of thoughts.
Stanza 16, 17, 18, 19, 20, 21, 22, 23: This looks a little confusing maybe place it like this:

Structure explains why creatures of the dark sea sing.
What tells why they sing?

Evolving is a science.

Living...is not.

Maybe this is what I'd say if asked how to explain forever:
"It starts over again every time you open your eyes."
This is a very pretty poem by the way!! Keep writing!