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Hello there! Holographic Ladybug here for a review!

While I can't really tear this apart (sorry 'bout that!), I am going to compliment you on such a wonderful job you've done (late at night, too!). You've really impressed me with this, so, without stalling much longer, let's get on to the review!

~The Great Bits~

Children ran around laughing, their voices like wind chimes bouncing off the walls of the village houses.

Women stood with weaved wooden baskets at their sides, hanging the fresh linen on the line while their husbands sat under the sagging porches smoking cigars and chatting about the recent harvest.
... Yet, like always, the men complained about how it could be better, how they could provide for their families more if only they had the money and a lot more time.
... So as the hours passed, the men would sit and complain about things that may never be changed and the women would hang the laundry shaking their heads and smiling.

As he reached the edges of the village people stopped dead in their tracks, for they hadn’t seen a man as such before.

Hi myjaspercat, Felistia here with a review on your prologue.

Story: The story is so interesting at the moment, a bit confusing but still very interesting. I would advise you to change it a bit so that it's a bit more straight forward instead of the flip between the first paragraph to the rest of the prologue, because some people will find it off putting and apply it to the rest of your story, which I am looking forward to by the way.

Characters: I am not sure about who the characters are right now or whether the first part of the story. They sound interesting though.

Description: You are fantastic when it comes to description. The words you use are great and the way you use them are beautiful. I really feel like I was in the characters body. I could feel their fear and hear and see the things around them.

Problems: The only problem I have with this prologue is that it is very confusing. I strongly recommend that you make it a bit more clear to what is happening.

Over all a very interesting prologue and I look forward to the first chapter. Please note me when the next chapter is out and I will get to it as soon as I can. Never stop writing and I hope you have a great day\night.