School Frustrations.

This is a very realistic description of most classrooms today! Especially mine, I have ZERO interest in school lately. And it feels like I am in some "tomb" indeed, except that I'm living my death! So anyway, nice poetry! The ending was very realistic, too, as the teachers always put us off by piling homework at the end of the class as if to signify that NO, THE TORTURE IS NOT OVER YET!

Keep it up!

Mist

Hello, @Collideascope! I am @emeraldfox, representing the Night Furies this review day!

YES!!! THANK YOU FOR WRITING THIS!!! I have been feeling lately that school does more harm than good. It just doesn't seem like a healthy environment to be in. There is so much pressure on us to constantly keep going for seven hours each day, five days each week, plus at least two hours of homework each night. That is at least 45 hours each week, which is more than many adults work. And the schools themselves aren't happy places that encourage learning. The lights are too bright, there isn't much color, we almost never see natural light (my school doesn't have windows and we can't eat lunch outside), and the setting almost never changes between classrooms. And the teaching styles used by most teachers aren't effective for a lot of students. Our schools don't promote actual learning, just test scores. I have friends who force themselves to throw up in the mornings so they can't go to school!

Woah. Sorry. I went on my own personal rant there. Okay, back to your poem...
Your poem brought a lot of issues that are found in schools into a format that is easy to follow. It flowed well and had great rhymes. Anyone in an American public school could easily relate to this (I don't know what it is like in other countries). You also used punctuation very well to add emphasis to this poem. You didn't have any grammar, spelling, capitalization, or punctuation errors.

Nice job! Sorry this wsn't a great review-it was mostly me ranting. :/ But you did a great job writing this. I could definitely relate and based on the other reviews, many other people can, too. *likes*

A very vivid description of a modern classroom today.
I enjoyed reading about it. In a way, it kind of bought back memories having me thinking about
Highschool and all the things that were done then. The teacher complaining and trying to calm us down, yet it was no use. By the time the noise subdued class was over and we had learned nothing, lol. Anyway, keep up the good work!

I enjoyed this poem a lot. I also hated school so I entered into independent study. However, I still feel your pain. I like how you expressed your disdain for school in a mature way. And by that I mean you didn't sound like a snot nose rebellious teenage that gets in trouble a lot and thinks that school "Is a waste of time." You know what I mean? Lol. School is essential to are lives, but it is still extremely frustrating which you already brought out. Your similes and metaphors are on point. I also enjoyed how you added dialogue. Sometimes dialogue can ruin a poem, but how you did it, it flowed very smoothly.
"Sitting in this class room, it starts to feel like a tomb."
I especially loved this simile. It feels as if I am actually back in a classroom in, dare I say it, a real public school. Ew, lol. Anyways good job and keep up the good work. Have a good day at school and happy writing. Good job.

Hello!

It's a nice poem and almost everyone can relate to this, i guess. the way you've written it with your imagination and how you have described the situation (at the school/class) is praise-worthy. Very good job.

And, as far as i have known, you don't make silly mistakes ( like me -_- ) and you're good in using punctuations so, i better not mention that.

"Closer and closer the end of the period draws near,

and still nothing has been accomplished here.

Then rings the bell and the teacher proclaimed

“This is due tomorrow, have a nice day!”

Very true and funny, it made me laugh!

Anyway, good work. and, here's a thing, i wanted to tell you. You're only 13 but you writings are really great. I wish i could do like that from your age. But, anyway. You're a brave kid, i pray that you'll prosper in your life and go very high!

Eeee! Good day! Have fun!

~Min

Hello!
I like this! Very funny, it seems like this is all that happens in my class every day... I only have one little nitpick.
I think you should right these in stanzas, like separating every "group of rhymes" with a line. Like this-
"Sitting in this classroom,
it starts to feel like a tomb.
According to the students,
the bell can't ring too soon.

At the front of the room...."
Other than that, I loved this! Great job, and keep writing!
~Snazzy
Stay Awesome

HAHAHA love it!! <3 It's cute i like how you rhymed the lines. I like the imagery you used in this work. you can feel the anticipation and irritation of the student, and the desperation of the teacher. Also it's something everyone can relate too. That crazy class the teacher has given up on.
LIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINES I LIIIIIIIIIKED!!!!!!

Their students have been like this
for several long months.
Seemingly stuck,
in some internal rut.
The ending of which is not clear,
but one thing is certain,
the teacher needs our attention up there.

Not sure i like they way it was set up and the words you used its just the few lines that stuck with me the most. cause we have again all been the in class feeling like you're in a slump.
Anyway great job!!!!!! keep up the great work. xD

Hi i'm Brielle just came here to read,and help out......
Hahahahahahahahahaha This is Funny and very true. Im in class right now and im not paying attetion. Its So hard when there just very Boring. They need to step up there teaching.
But you forgot the part where we get hungery, and think about food and stuff. but love this becasue im doing the samething i can really relate to this.

["Then rings the bell and the teacher proclaimed

“This is due tomorrow, have a nice day!"]
That made me laugh.. Sometimes i just want to fall alseep.
and yes we dont learn nothing anyway when they teach but sometimes we do. I get It and i Love It.
Bye now!