Don’t Bother.
Don’t bother looking for me
I found my way down under.
I’ve just gotten so sick
of you pointing out my blunders.
Don't bother praying for me to come back.
Unless you want to waste your final breath.
You see,
Everyone in the down under
is waiting for a savior
followed by a crimson trail.
So go ahead, damn me to hell
Im not trying to save my soul.
Call me what you will.
Because when it comes down to it
you aren't worth a dollar bill.
Don't bother wasting your breath.
I'm done trying to explain myself.
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Firepower takes a couple quick glances around, then creeps over and drops an envelope before driving hastily away. The envelope contains a letter which reads:
Interesting ideas you have going on in this poem! The concept of 'down under' is pretty intriguing, although I won't pretend I understand it that well.
The first 'bother' is capitalized, even though it shouldn't be. However, I suspect this was a style choice on your part.
The rhyming is a little wonky, because you have a couple sets of very nice rhymes (under/blunders) (will/bill) and these give parts of the poem rhythm, but not all of it. Because of this, it feels a little half-finished.
Wow. it is a wonderful creation.
It's really strong writing. but perhaps, I'm bit confused whether it is indicated to some person. Well, I'm not criticizing.
I don't read poetry very often.
The lines I've loved most are, Oh no!
no specifications. I have loved it all.
All i want to say, Keep it up!
Good day!
Thanks
No worries!
I cant see your review...
You strike again! I absolutely love it! I love this line;
"Everyone in the down under
is waiting for a savior
followed by a crimson trail."
Very nice! I feel like you wrote this poem about someone I know, it's so relatable. You have a gift...
thank you
something tells me you will like tomorrows poem more however
I can't wait)
I'm happy to hear that