Dearest Stepmother.

Very good. It is a chilling relationship sounds like a game of tug-a-war almost. I love the simple imagery. I can picture a woman standing over a child telling them constantly what they are doing wrong or they're not doing someething right. SO you did a great job at getting your thoughts acrost to the reader in a beautiful simple flowing way! Well done it was really well writen.

*Keep up th great job!*

FancyDragon

This is really good. It's chilling and rhythmic and you get your point across well.

I really only have a few things I'd like to edit for better flow, and take these with a grain of salt because they're just my opinion.

In general, I think you use too many commas, so I'm going to go through this line by line and see what to nitpick.

1. First line looks good, though I'd consider taking out the "just."

2. I'd take out the comma, the pause is kind of awkward

3. Same as line 2, the comma is awkward and, if it were a sentence, ungrammatical.

4. I'd consider taking out the comma and changing "chilling" to "chill," but you don't really
need to. It sounds pretty good as it is.


Second stanza:

2. I'd replace "you saying" with "hearing." It's less complicated that way.

3. Again, the comma should be taken out for better flow. You could also say "isn't what I want to do" instead, because I personally think the line is a tad wordy, although I do like the sarcasm "list of things to do" shows. Up to you!

Third stanza:
1. I'd take out the comma again.

2. I'd take out "solely." It makes it less wordy and I think it has greater impact. (Also, you forgot the apostrophe in "heart's."

Last stanza:
1. I love this line.

2. Slightly awkward, but I still like it.

3. I'd replace "let me go" with "release." I think it conveys the relief the narrator would feel better.

Your last two lines are interesting. I can't decide whether or not I like that you broke the rhyming pattern. I think I do - it works well and draws importance to the line. It's a good note to end on. (But part of me is just going "You broke the pattern!")

Yeah, I like it.

Anyway, I hope this wasn't too harsh, because I really did like it. Feel free to discard some of my nitpicks and use others. Whatever works for you.

Have a good day!
-Meandbooks

Wow!
Your writing style is absoloutley great! I like how your content is relatable and how many readers can grasp the feelings youre putting out there! I can defidently relate!
Some of these lines can really grab the attention of people and make them see things your way.
I do hope to see some more work from you soon and wish you the best of luck in all your writing.

Hello!
This is only my second review in about a month...so forgive me if this is a little...bad. Anyway...let's begin, shall we? First off, this is a wonderful poem. I like that sometimes it did rhyme, but sometimes it doesn't. But even when it doesn't, it just feels like it does. I can't relate to this poem, but I found it really touching. I only have one little nitpick.

"I've grown weary of you saying I'm nothing but rude.
Pleasing your majesty, isn't on my list of things to do."

I think this last line breaks up the rhythm a little bit. Maybe...but it's probably just me. Anyway, this is really well written! I hope to see a lot more of you poems in the future!

~Snazzy
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