Hello, Artemis! Wolf here for a review.
You're making this so much harder than it should be xD Of course this was a shorter part than the rest, but it was still great. I'm curious to find out more on what the witches didc, or why they did it. Sure they're upset with Billie, but she can't be the only reason, can she? The ending line from Thea is great, it gives us an ominous feeling.
So, I notice now that Thea and Iris are trying to include Billie more, and I recall last chapter that Billie said they were scared what would happen to them if they ignored her. It makes sense, but I can really feel it here.
Another thing is I notice there are a lot of characters, which of course makes sense because its an enormous school! But I'm really glad that we're getting more of a look into them. Of course Lucian we've been learning tons about, but Iris has never really spoke until recently, and Thea was a jerk. Just listening to them talk is nice, and it's interesting to hear their voices.
There's a lot of wondering for me right now. I'm wondering what Lucian's planning, what Artemis will do, what the heck is up with Sedna. You're doing a great job leading me along with enough bait that I don't lose interest, but not too much as I get bored. Sorry not much critique here, but your writing has improved so much. And there are asterisks! Yay! Anywho, onward! Happy Review Day and Keep Writing,
~Wolfare~
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