Hi there! I'm Green and I'm here to offer a review on your poem.
Firstly, as someone who has anxiety, I could really relate to this poem. You captured feelings of anxiety in a way I haven't seen before. The comparison to swimming, drowning and being in water is something that really greatly reflects what anxiety can feel like. Especially since I have a HUGE fear of the water & swimming aha.
Secondly, the imagery was really great, it felt like i was reading a short story about someone drowning.
I thought the use of punctuation and capitalisation was clever. A lot of people might be pedantic about this but I really believe that poetry is whatever you want it to be and I think that the irregular capital letters really helps the feeling of anxiety that is spreading throughout the poem, since anxiety hardly conforms to the rules of poetry.
Also, just as a quick note from someone who loves Greek mythology, I like the imagery of Charybdis.
I can't think of any criticisms! So just keep up the great work
Keep writing!
-4revgreen
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