I'm A Writer

RoyalHighness here! Let's start, shall we?

So, I'm not a fan of the quotations around the word "monsters." I think it takes away from the effect that that word can have on the reader, and I think by adding quotations, you're invalidating those monsters' existence and, by extension, your reason for writing about them.
I like the way you write heavily but simply. Be careful not to stray into angsty whining. (Which you don't do here, or else I'd point it out. Just be on the lookout for that devolution in your writing process, if it should occur. I know it did for me.)

I love writing, And being a writer.

But when I pray to God at night, and force myself to think that 'they' are monsters instead of real life, breathing humans, I stare idly at my clasped hands.

I love it. This story is so filled with emotion. "I write about my chest. About how it falls and leaps every second I breathe. Every second I try to breathe" I love that part. I can relate so fully to it. I know the feeling of trying to draw in that one breath. I liked how the story starts and ends with a sentance that has "I'm a writer" in it. It creates a feeling of the story being tied together.

One thing that might work: you have lots of really small sentences then you have "I write about fears while I try not to let a single tear drop at night, because I'm afraid I'll wake my grandmother up" I find it doesn't really flow. Would it work if you put a period after "night", and take out the "because"? It would look kind of like this: "...I try not to let a single tear drop. I'm afraid..."

I look forward to reading more of your work!!

Hi! Akelia here! Time for a review

So, let's get started with this review. I like to do all my reviews with sweet and sour, so let's start with sour, just to get it over with.

1. I noticed that in the sentence ["I write about fears while I try not to let a single tear drop at night because I'm afraid I'll wake my grandmother up."] It'd not really anything is wrong with it, but when I was reading this, it was kind of hard to follow because the sentence is longer. I would suggest a comma after the word 'because.'

Now for the sweet!

I thought this was SOOO good! While being a writer myself, I really thought that this kind of applied to me, and it was relatable. You were very descriptive in your writing, and I really got a picture. The picture I got was that the writer is kind of scared about the things they write about, and that those things come to life. All in all, this was very well written! Good job!

Never stop writing

-Akelia Taske

King Here
This work kind of started to look as a relatable one at the beginning because the monsters part under the bed. I thought about every small kid's fear about the monsters under the bed and the serial killer in the closet. I hope I am not the only one. It became very deeper and realistic after the start. This work really shows the world from the eyes of a very good writer who is really a writer in any matters and ways. The way you decribe each movement and each sound that you hear. The good writer sometimes uses the things around them from the daily life of their to make up a good storyline or whatever it is when they write. A writer that is documentaring/noting everything to use it later. The pen in the blood was a very interesting sudden extra detail. Only two things that I want to point out.

until the fears that have spoiled my cheeks, reach the fabric.

I love writing, And being a writer.