Hi, ancientforever. I really liked this poem. Your descriptions are great. Another thing i really liked was your ending. My favourite stanza would be:
"the river runs so silent through the green
not whispering or babbling like the brook
no fish or snake may grace its glassy waters
and none could see the bottom if they looked"
The thing that needs improvement are your puncuations. Use a bit more and more appropriate punctuation marks.
Anyway, a good poem and i hope to read more of your work.
- Anshira; Apple dumpling gang.
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