Poor little girl

So short and yet so very effective and powerful. I call that a successful poem. I loved "They promised you the world/They gave you a corner". Very, very, powerful. Loved everything about it! Great job!

Simple, short, and really nice. I really like the descriptions in this poem too. I love it just how it is, but it would've been interesting what you might of written in a second paragraph. I love the ending too.

I loved this. Really did

Such a simple poem, but holds so much emotion. The final two lines just wrapped it all up. A great finish to a great beginning...and middle ;P

Great job,
-Brie♥

Hi,

This was beautifully written. The opening line was very effective and it flowed well as a whole. I especially enjoyed:
"It made your eyes grow cold,
And you've forgotten how to smile,
Because you can't longer capture
The body that was once yours."
and the final two lines are very effective, perfectly concise and the tone and emotion work very well.

I'd change "torn to pieces". Can you say this in a fresher, more specific way? It might be interesting to experiment with adding a second stanza.

A pleasure.

Hope this helps. Feel free to p.m me if you have any questions,

Jas

I like this piece! Simple, yet I can feel the emotion. It's interesting in a way that I can't explain. Great work!