I love this poem. It shows how life is too short. But don't just look at it as a game. It is a really deep, meanigful poem. I think you wrote it well and keeping it short also made it nice. The words were all smooth except for that line that was too long here:
qaralynn wrote:You said life is too short,
Don't leave things undone.
But now I'm standing at your grave,
#FF4000 ">And realize life isn't just about having fun.
You never took anything serious,
And went your own way.
Now I'm just wondering,
If you said the same,
While staring in the eyes of the death.
That line is just a little bit too long in comparison to the others. My favourite lines are the first tow, because they are so true.
Deanie x
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