Violence

Children with Stars in their Veins (Chapter 40)

a/n: hey, thanks for checking out Starry Veins! This is the novel I wrote for Round V of LMS, and it's still a first draft! While I don't discourage any feedback, I prefer not to receive feedback on grammar! I'm not polishing this draft up yet, so I'm not as concerned about editing. I am, of course, open to all feedback, but I ask that you keep this in consideration! Thanks <3

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[Mishal]

Though he knew there was no concrete truth to an oracle’s prophecy, Mishal couldn’t help replaying the words Inala had spoken over and over in his mind.

And the terrible metallic taste of blood and destruction wouldn’t leave his mouth. Was his future, all of them or just one Inala had seen, to be drenched in blood and strife? What happens?

Oathbreaker. She made it sound like he wouldn’t have a choice in the matter, regardless of his own decisions or desires.

If nothing else, Mishal wished to be true, to be honest, and to do his part for good in this world. To break an oath went against all of that, or nearly all of that.

Luthera’s manor was exquisite and dazzling, more than one would expect of cartography, which was not all that fruitful or useful of a practise. What with the shifting lands, never to remain constant, the only maps were those that could be made for the domesticated lands or the kingdoms and villages.

But for all the marble floors and lacquered wood-panelled walls, Mishal rather preferred himself outside. It was warmer, and a fountain spat silver water from the mouth of a siren statue. The siren was carved beautifully, shining in the sun. And somehow, it captured the wild and dangerous demeanour of the rare dwellers of the deep.

Not that Mishal had ever seen a siren, or for that matter, wanted to.

There was little to be said about the landscape though. What could have been an incredible garden terrace was instead a bland clearing interrupted by the city rising in the background. The houses that disrupted the lush, thick grass that grew to his ankles and swayed in the breeze. There were silver trellises lining the walls, with not a single flowering vine or ivy in sight.

Rowan and their mother would have built something divine and colourful here, given the opportunity. A place like this, next to a cottage on an open and arable field, would have been a place of wonder to them.

The door from the back of the manor clattered open. From within came Margaretta and Isadora, stepping onto the granite-step pathway leading onto the lawn.

He rose from his seat on an eloquently hewn stone bench, with curling scroll designs at each corner. “Did you learn anything of the ruins?”

Isadora approached him first. “Not much beyond what we already knew,” she said. Tucked under her arm was what appeared to be a leather-bound book or journal. “Only that there may be strange magic there, of some sort, which could be the curse that everyone is so apt to mention. And whatever you may be able to glean from this.” She held out the journal towards him.

He took it and opened to the first page. It was streaked by mud and age and who knew what else. There was a chunk of text in a block at the centre of the paper, written in a deep sienna ink with what had probably been a quill.

The language itself was nonsense. At first glance, the script looked to be that of Magic, but he couldn’t make out any words. Several of the letters seemed to be switched out from another script altogether. And it would be nonsense to him anyway, for the most part. He knew what Magic’s language looked like but couldn’t read more than the simplest words.

He flipped to the next page. At the top, in the mundane language, it read: Kagervon’s Company. Spyder. 3092. Fifth day of Cloudburst.

“What is this?” he asked. He skimmed through several more pages, but aside from the signature and more dates that marked each separate entry, there was nothing more he could read. At a glance, anyway.

One of the last pages he looked at was smeared with something dark. He shut the journal as the smell of blood began to fill his senses again. He blinked and shook his head to dismiss it.

“A journal,” Margaretta said. She crossed her arms and stood behind Isadora, looking more like a sentry than a guild’s master. “It was the only possession the surviving member of that expedition was carrying when they were found. Can you read it?”

He handed it back over to her and she took it with a frown. “It looks like a bastardised version of Magic script. So no, I can’t. One of the professors, maybe, but it’s strange. I’d suggest Coquelin, and or Rowan for that matter, but obviously that is not what our current situation permits.”

Isadora folded her arms over her chest, steeling her expression. “Unless we went back, translated, and found out more about it. We’d be better prepared too. And Ori could come this time, there would be no one better to bring.”

Margaretta shot Isadora a scathing look. “And when we find out it’s useless, we’ll have wasted all that time for nothing.” She put the journal under her arm. “I’ve already asked everyone we brought. I’ll go around the city to see if I can find anyone who recognises the script.”

“The ruins aren’t going anywhere,” Isadora remarked. “We’re not on a deadline.”

But Margaretta’s back was already turned, and she did not respond. The door, as she stepped inside, clattered shut behind her.

Mishal sank back to the stone bench with a sigh. Isadora scowled at the door, then kicked the granite step. She opened her mouth to say something as she turned to face him, but then stopped herself. Her expression softened instead.

She sat beside him. “What’s wrong?”

He doubted that was what she had been intending to say, but he didn’t want to get into another heated debate about Margaretta was or was not hiding. He was tired of secrets and feeling small for questioning her.

“It’s inconsequential, don’t worry about it,” he said, dismissive. He didn’t particularly want to speak his thoughts into existence. They were bad enough bouncing around in his head.

“It’s not if it’s troubling you.” She hesitated, leaned forward onto her knees with a soft exhale. Her silvery-blonde hair fell glistening off her shoulder, tumbling down her back in streams. “Is it about the oracle’s reading? You’ve been really quiet about it since.”

He shut his eyes and listened to the sound of a nearby bird’s trill. The stench of gore filled his nostrils. “I know it could be a path I’ll never walk. In my head, I know that. It’s just what she said… Even the possibility of it. And the way it made me feel…”

When he opened his eyes and glanced towards Isadora, she looked sympathetic. Sad. “I wouldn’t have pushed you into it if I knew it was going to upset you.”

“But it would be ignorance then, wouldn’t it? That’s no better.” He stopped, managed half a smile. “I guess you should have asked her how I was going to react.”

She laughed. “As long as you know that, likely, none of it will come to pass.” She put her chin into her hands. “Perhaps the oath she was referring to needs to be broken. Maybe you’re forced into it. Maybe she was saying it to be dramatic, or ominous. She was an oracle, after all. They are known and praised for their theatrics. It’s their job.”

He might have believed that too, had he not felt what he had. Everything, perhaps in particular and stark in his mind, a terrible and crushing guilt all at once, the moment Inala had called him Oathbreaker.

“Maybe,” he said, instead of burdening her with the same dread. “But if I wasn’t forced into it, why would I take an oath and give my solemn word if it was to something I didn’t believe in?”

Isadora shrugged. “Situations change. Maybe you learn something new and your honour demands a different outlook and solution. And that’s only if it comes true. Maybe you won’t break any oath.”

Whatever you choose, you will become oathbreaker. “Maybe I won’t.”

She smiled, lips curling in a way that he knew he was going to dislike whatever came out of her mouth next. Stars, it looked like one of Cassius’ expressions.

“It wasn’t all bad anyway. Sounds like she saw someone awful important to you. With lovely blue eyes too. And you’ll save him.”

“Or doom him. You forgot there’s a chance he’ll die, or possibly something worse, because of me.” When Inala had spoken of his ‘golden falcon’, his mouth had filled with the taste of soil and dust and fresh water and he swore he could see the sky on his eyelids. But he could still smell the blood.

“But I know you,” Isadora said, insistent. “You’re brave and smart. You’ll save him, Mishal. I know you will.”

The dark fog plaguing his mind eased as he watched Isadora’s calm and confident smile. He released tension he’d been unaware he was holding from his shoulders and abdomen. “You think so?”

She nodded. “I know so. I’m almost jealous of this mystery man. It sounds as though you’ll spoil him something fierce.”

He smiled, and though it was all he could manage, he felt lighter. “No more than you or the other four.”

She laughed again, clear as the bells she loved. “Don’t let Alanna hear you say that. If it were up to her, I bet she’d steal up all your time and energy.”

“And I would give it to her,” he said.

But even with Isadora’s reassurances, he laid awake that night. Isadora’s steady breathing nearby softened some of the fear wrapped in his chest, but it also isolated him. She had fallen asleep at least an hour ago, reading the tome Ashael had given her, now splayed out on her pillow beside her head.

Mishal was left to himself, staring up at the smooth, impeccably clean ceiling, white and almost threatening somehow.

It was not the smell of blood, nor the threat of honour that so greatly disquieted him. Though terrible both were, and deeply unsettled he was by them.

No. He had heard screaming. It was momentary, hardly more than half a second, but he would never forget it. It was pure rage, fury unleashed and echoing. Someone had called his name, more than one person, and it made him want to shrivel.

What would he do, even in only one life he may never live, that would make someone scream his name with so much hatred?

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starlitmind
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How do I only have 12 chapters left whaat

Though he knew there was no concrete truth to an oracle’s prophecy, Mishal couldn’t help replaying the words Inala had spoken over and over in his mind.


If an oracle gave a prophecy in a book, I see it as concrete truth xD

Was his future, all of them or just one Inala had seen, to be drenched in blood and strife?


I'm a bit confused by this sentence cx by "all of them," do you mean all of his futures/paths of his future? Cause you had future as singular, but "all of them" is referring to something plural, but I don't know what that something is :pShe held out the journal towards him.[/quote]

YES I need to know what was in that journal cx although it probably has some sad stuff in it

He took it and opened to the first page. It was streaked by mud and age and who knew what else.


And monster guts

He knew what Magic’s language looked like but couldn’t read more than the simplest words.


I love how on of your languages is Magic cx I'm just wondering what that would look like. What if you could only write in Magic if you used a rainbow pen

“Unless we went back, translated, and found out more about it. We’d be better prepared too. And Ori could come this time, there would be no one better to bring.”

Margaretta shot Isadora a scathing look. “And when we find out it’s useless,


Wait do they have to make it to the ruins by a certain time or something??

“The ruins aren’t going anywhere,” Isadora remarked. “We’re not on a deadline.”


0.0

Is it something like they have to make it before the sunset on the eve of some day, otherwise the ruins will be locked? Reminds me of The Hobbit! c: Of course Margaretta is hiding more :p

She laughed. “As long as you know that, likely, none of it will come to pass.”


Looks like Isadora just jinxed it

but ooh I'm actually really interested to see when we'll get to read about the scene the oracle prophesied. I love seeing where it all comes together c:

Whatever you choose, you will become oathbreaker.


I love your repetition of this. It shows how shaken up Mishal is, and it's also very ominous and creepy

With lovely blue eyes too. And you’ll save him.”


IS IT CASSIUS I can't remember if he had blue eyes or not, but I feel like he did?

“Don’t let Alanna hear you say that. If it were up to her, I bet she’d steal up all your time and energy.”

“And I would give it to her,” he said.


AWW

What would he do, even in only one life he may never live, that would make someone scream his name with so much hatred?


Eee you're killing me with curiosity. You're set up such a dark and ominous mood in this chapter, and I'm honestly a bit creeped out (in a good way, of course!) What if the person screaming was actually Mishal? :c that's probably not right, but I'm not really sure who else it would be as of now. I hope Mishal eases up in the next chapter; he desires happiness <3

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JabberHut
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YEEEEESSSSSSSSS I've been waiting for this!! Last we saw Mishal, he was really shaken up after what Inala had said about his future. And that's always scary seeing someone so steadfast and constant get this unhinged.

And he's totally thinking like the reasonable kid he is. Like... if he becomes an oathbreaker, that means he voluntarily made an oath only to voluntarily break the oath even if that meant voluntarily choosing to go against his personal values. It's totally an unlikely scenario for him and he simply canNOT see himself in such a position, and yet he's now thinking there's a possibility, and he's not as much horrified as he is confused as to what could possibly make him do something like that.

I love Mishal. He's so great. You write him so well.

The transition earlier on from Mishal's thoughts to the manor's scenery felt a little jarring, but I got over it pretty quick because by golly that is a beautiful estate. What a peaceful place to be in. And I LOOOOVED the little history/worldbuilding bits about cartography as a career and how it's usually not a very successful one. But this guy clearly is doing rather well for himself, so either he's a very good cartographer or he has a second job to support his hobby. Or is just a very good salesman. XD WHATEVER THE CASE MAY BE I'm very excited to learn more about it as well as the cartographer himself (or herself). They clearly allow visitors to stay, or at least Margaretta's clan here, so there's some kind of reason or history for this.

I have to stop myself before I theorize about things because my brain goes bonkers, as we know.

The way Margaretta and Isadora appeared, marching toward him with that journal, totally made me laugh. Maybe it was just how I pictured it, but like they had no real reason to be cornering him like that. It was obviously explained later that the two of them asked others already before they went to Mishal, but I didn't know that yet, so my brain saw it as "okay, they got home and immediately looked for Mishal" and I just. It didn't make any sense. XD BUT fortunately that was not the case. In fact, he was the last person they went to before leaving the estate for more help.

I guess I'm.. surprised they didn't bring a professor that could make at least a little more ground than Mishal (who, I know, made no progress, but he at least suggested people who could help). After all, their guild specializes in this kind of thing, so maybe they just neglected to bring a language professor or... cryptography professor. I dunno, I was surprised they didn't really have anyone to help with this kind of thing. Maybe even detect a bad enchantment or magic residuuue or recognize a picture that "Oh Professor Smith as a book on this!" Though we did get Mishal's observation about how the words look, which is what made me think of cryptography or some sort of code.

The way Margaretta never acknowledged Isadora's statement about there being no rush... like, okay, it's OBVIOUS at this point Margaretta is hiding something from them. But if Isadora isn't at least slightly annoyed by it at this point... she has the patience of a god, I guess, because I'd be like Look.

So Margaretta's totally gonna give up on the journal if she doesn't find someone that can help. I hope that means, like, Mishal or Isadora can take it back and secretly study it or work something out. Or OR MAYBE they'll leave it behind somewhere and ROWAN will somehow get their hands on it anO HADOS;JFLSDKF

okay I don't know. I'M JUST VERY CURIOUS.

This heart-to-heart between Mishal and Isadora was totally needed, too. I'm glad this happened, and I'm glad Mishal felt at least a little better by the end. Everything Isadora said is totally 100% true and I was like thank you isadora for being there. The teasing about Mishal and his special someone was so freaking cute and Mishal's reaction was just so freaking cuter and i just. I will be honest, though, considering how far along this story is, I'm partially convinced we already met this golden eagle guy and I'm not gonna lie, the idea of it being Cassius is like hysterically possible and I wouldn't be so opposed to the idea. But basically, for the sake of character development and getting the reader to fall in love with the idea of Mishal hooking up with the golden eagle guy, I'll be looking forward to seeing how this works out in the end. :D

Maybe it'll be a Frozen thing and it's, like, not a S.O. but a family member or dearest friend -- that sort of loved one. hahhahaahaha you wouldn't do that to me, would you

would you?

LOVELY CHAPTER! We got over a couple hurdles on this one, so hopefully Mishal is feeling better, and maybe we'll see some more momentum on that journal too. :D

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kaitlyn wrote a review · Tue Aug 04, 2020 6:44 am

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Aaand I am back. *drumroll*

First Impression: Ooooohh....well predictably Mishal is worrying his head off about the prophecy. And some interesting points that you have chosen to highlight out of this Oracle's statements. I sense some something is afoot. (That sounds way too poetic). The chapter itself flows nicely as always and does a good job of finally showing us how Mishal has been taking all of this.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Though he knew there was no concrete truth to an oracle’s prophecy, Mishal couldn’t help replaying the words Inala had spoken over and over in his mind.


Of course he is going to believe it completely.

Oathbreaker. She made it sound like he wouldn’t have a choice in the matter, regardless of his own decisions or desires.


No Mishal, you have no choice, but it won't be as bad as you think.

There was little to be said about the landscape though. What could have been an incredible garden terrace was instead a bland clearing interrupted by the city rising in the background. The houses that disrupted the lush, thick grass that grew to his ankles and swayed in the breeze. There were silver trellises lining the walls, with not a single flowering vine or ivy in sight.


This is some very nice imagery that is telling a story all by itself and that is amazing.

The language itself was nonsense. At first glance, the script looked to be that of Magic, but he couldn’t make out any words. Several of the letters seemed to be switched out from another script altogether. And it would be nonsense to him anyway, for the most part. He knew what Magic’s language looked like but couldn’t read more than the simplest words.

He flipped to the next page. At the top, in the mundane language, it read: Kagervon’s Company. Spyder. 3092. Fifth day of Cloudburst.


That sounds like a lot of languages in there. Interesting to see what this magic language is all about.

He handed it back over to her and she took it with a frown. “It looks like a bastardised version of Magic script. So no, I can’t. One of the professors, maybe, but it’s strange. I’d suggest Coquelin, and or Rowan for that matter, but obviously that is not what our current situation permits.”


For all the hype about how hard it was to read that, Mishal figured it out kinda quick here. Yes he can't read it but he recognized it so fast.

“The ruins aren’t going anywhere,” Isadora remarked. “We’re not on a deadline.”


Valid point there. Margaretta becomes even more suspicious with her response to that statement.

He shut his eyes and listened to the sound of a nearby bird’s trill. The stench of gore filled his nostrils. “I know it could be a path I’ll never walk. In my head, I know that. It’s just what she said… Even the possibility of it. And the way it made me feel…”


Good job Mishal. Bottling up feelings like that will never help you.

“It wasn’t all bad anyway. Sounds like she saw someone awful important to you. With lovely blue eyes too. And you’ll save him.”


Very wise choice by Isadora for changing the subject. Or is that more intentional than it appears?

He smiled, and though it was all he could manage, he felt lighter. “No more than you or the other four.”

She laughed again, clear as the bells she loved. “Don’t let Alanna hear you say that. If it were up to her, I bet she’d steal up all your time and energy.”

“And I would give it to her,” he said.


Nice little moment there.

But even with Isadora’s reassurances, he laid awake that night. Isadora’s steady breathing nearby softened some of the fear wrapped in his chest, but it also isolated him. She had fallen asleep at least an hour ago, reading the tome Ashael had given her, now splayed out on her pillow beside her head.


Good that we have not forgotten about that particular book.

No. He had heard screaming. It was momentary, hardly more than half a second, but he would never forget it. It was pure rage, fury unleashed and echoing. Someone had called his name, more than one person, and it made him want to shrivel.

What would he do, even in only one life he may never live, that would make someone scream his name with so much hatred?


Extremely interesting ending right there. Very intriguing indeed.

Overall: Another really well written chapter as always. Gave us that perspective that we needed to bring this whole thing full circle. And now we are done getting ready for the next part of this story I believe. I sense that these slower paced chapters will soon be over.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry

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oceans wrote a review · Tue Aug 04, 2020 5:31 am

Hi, Mellifera!

This story is very entertaining, intense and a pleasure to read. I love your choice of title, it is very intriguing. I really enjoy your use of language and the structure of your sentences, you seem experienced with details. The ending leaves the reader wanting more.

Good job and keep writing!

<3



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