Magic starlight in the sky
Glitters gracefully, and I
With wonder upward gaze and sigh
For the beauty of the world.
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This is a very sweet poem
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I like how you broke up your lines to keep the "y" and "I" rhyme, also on the third line too, where you rhyme the word sign. To begin, you start us off with magic starlight. Right away, that captured my attention and allowed me to picture this beautiful sky, one that I saw when I was younger, laying under the stars.
That first line there confused me a bit. Maybe you could add a comma or a pause after the word wonder? Normally when we speak I would say "gaze upward" but upward gaze might be describing more of an action, but it just stood out to me.
You end by breaking the rhyme scheme, which I actually love. It gives this more mysterious and free feeling to the end, as you marvel at the world. The world is imperfect, just like the rhyme scheme. Fantastic and keep on writing!
Your friend,
Ellie
Hello! I am AkuRashomon and I am here to give a comment/review. The title gave me interest because I love the stars and literature about them.
I love it, it is short and simple. This reminds me of the old poetry I read in my English class. The pattern is also AAAB. Expressing a star to be a magic starlight is a great opening for the poem. I imagine a person staring right into the sky, admiring the stars that shine in the night. I want to write about the stars now, thanks to you! Thank you for sharing your poem!
This is such a beautiful poem I feel like this is one of those cases where less is more.
I am honestly a fan of astronomy so I love it!!!
It's abstract in my opinion which is awesome!
I like the last two line the most
With wonder upward gaze and sigh
For the beauty of the world.
IT IS SO POETIC WHICH IS BEAUTIFUL!!!
I look forward to seeing more poems by you!
This poem makes it obvious you have a gift for poetry!
its a cute little poem. Not much to write about, but the words look like they are carefully thought out. It looks more like a haiku without proper syllable count. I do like stars! I honestly think that the ending is a little bit off, since it is the only verse without a rhyme, but that's just me. I don't read much anyways. Good job, fellow author!
I wish that it was bigger, but still a concise good read.
The stars are golden. It's beauty can't be tracked. This poem demonstrates that in a simple and meaningful way.
It's a really well done, short poem.