EverLight here with a review. This review is not intended to offend or hurt you or make your novel or poem seem bad, but be warned- you may feel offended anyway
First Impression
This was cute. Although using 'Roses are red and violets are blue' as a first line kind of threw me off. After all that is such a cliched line now days...but the rest of your poem worked beautifully.
Nitpicks
You did have one nitpick in this line-
I'm reminded of you
And of love that is true.
You missed a comma by the word you. And, this is optional but I think that last line would sound better if you removed the word of-let me show you-
I'm reminded of you
And love that is true
Other then those errors this was great. Keep it up!
EverLight Out
Points: 575
Reviews: 212
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