Friendship is a bouquet,
And each friend is a flower,
Hand-picked by the Father,
And sent at the perfect hour.
Every one is different,
And each holds a special place;
And every blossom represents
Experiences that nothing can erase.
-
Whenever I stop and examine
My friendship bouquet so fair,
I pause with smiles and wonder
At each flower that God has placed there.
As my life progresses on,
The bouquet grows some more,
And yet each new beauty is distinct
From all the others before.
-
But on occasion there's added
A flower distinct from the rest,
A little more fragrant and a little more lovely -
Among the best of the best.
The others all are lovely,
But these special ones really stand out -
A rose among plain wildflowers,
A treasure, without a doubt.
-
This is how I view you,
And I want to let you know
Your friendship's been a fragrant rose
That in my heart I treasure so.
I value you because you're unique -
No other could fill your role -
Because of you and your friendship,
I've grown within my soul.
-
You are a precious friend -
A gem, a treasure, a rose,
And what your friendship's meant to me
Only God really knows.
If you could see things as I see them,
You'd know because you're you,
You've blessed my life with such a gift,
The gift of friendship true.
-
Some friends may often leave us,
And some God takes away;
They all will pass from us sometime,
And none are here to stay.
But whether you stay or go from my life,
Your friendship's flower is there,
And so much of why my life's so fragrant
Is because that you were there.
-
So as I go through life,
I'll have my bouquet fair,
To bring me smiles and happiness
Each time I see it there.
And each time I look it over,
I'll see your friendship's rose,
And you know I can't forget you
While my heart so thankful glows
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(Copyright 2018)
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WOW
This is really a great poem... The description was terrific and I love the explanation of what each thing on the flower represent. I feel the poem from my perspective and its really a true poem about friendship. Its honestly my favorite poem so far of yours. I hope you write more terrific poems like this.
Sincerely
Anma
This is a great poem on friendship, whether it stays or leaves. It helped me rethink some of my own relationships with others. Indeed, even if a friend leaves, their footprints remain, for better or for worse. Please do continue writing your poems. They are excellent.
Hi!
First off, I love this poem. The rhythm is great and I'm always impressed when people can figure out rhymes such as these. There's just one stanza in particular that I want to focus on:
This stanza is kind of the turning point in the poem, where we see what it's all about. There are a couple things I would change here.
1. "A little more fragrant and a little more lovely" could be "More fragrant and more lovely". It's pretty much the same idea but bolder. I understand why you'd want to put the "A little"s there and I don't have much of a preference either way but I do think it would flow better without those words.
2. "Really" could be cut from "But these special ones really stand out". The message is just as clear without it.
3. You used the word "lovely" twice in the stanza - consider switching one of the out for another word to keep things from getting repetitive.
That's all I have! Great job on this poem; it was a joy to read!
Flyingsquirrel42
Hello, Annie here to leave you with a short review!
First of all, I really enjoy this poem. To see relationships with people as something that is delicate like a flower is seemingly fitting and realistic.
As for your poem, I do have a few suggestions. Below is your first stanza:
Friendship is a bouquet,
And each friend is a flower,
Hand-picked by the Father,
And sent at the perfect hour.
Every one is different,
And each holds a special place;
And every blossom represents
Experiences that nothing can erase.
If you read this stanza out loud, you will notice that the word erase does not fit your rhyme scheme. It seems forced and awkward. I would also get rid of 'And' in your fourth line. I feel like removing it would make it flow better.
It seems as if your poem was written in an iambic fashion. You are pretty consistent with this, and with a little bit of work, you could really have something cool going for you.
- * - *- * -*-
To bring me smiles and happiness
(- is unstressed * is stressed)
You see, with iambs in place, the reader can hear your poem, it is almost like a heartbeat. I truly feel like your poem is alive.
Overall, this is a wonderful poem. If I tried, I would not be able to sit here and point out things that you have done glaringly wrong. Your format is good, your stanzas flow well, and you maintain the same meter. I do suggest going through and reading your work out loud, so that you can fix a few SMALL details ( like I pointed out earlier in this review).
Happy writing! I really enjoyed reading your amazing work!
-Anniepoo