We looked drunk.
Riding a high,
Not on wine,
Not of sweets,
Not on love,
But on
Happiness, Friends,
And memories.
What is it
About late night hours,
Junk food,
And music,
That could make you laugh
For hours?
It's those times,
That I remember
On these days,
Days where I can't feel
The love that spirals
Around me,
Days where I can't free my mind
Of all the self hatred
I absorb.
What is it
About minutes before sleep,
Feeling like hours,
That turn into memories
Of every
mistake you've ever made?
I shut my eyes,
Cascading darkness all around me.
Breathing in the moment we shared,
Not drunk,
Not giddy in love,
But just friends riding into the night
Together.
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Hey ! So sweet feelings of being in friendship. It remindedbme of my childhood n youth. Those were the days. Especially your these words.
" Days where I can't feel
The love that spirals around me
Days where I cantbfree my mind
Of all the self hatred
I absorb "
These lines touched me. Keep up the good writing. Blessings
Hey! I am here to review your amazing poem!
That was really nice. Hanging out with friends is very fun, and the best time you can have. With friends it seems like nothing can go wrong! I loved you poem, and I feel that people can relate to it! As it says in the poem, friendship is always something to get high on.
The punctuation was perfect, as well as spelling. It flows nicely, and just truly an amazing peom! Keep up the good work!
-Ronan
aww! that was really sweet! hanging out with friends ( specially on school nights) is really the best thing, cause when we are with them we really dont have a care in the world. i loved your poem and suprisingly enough conected to it, cause i feel that friendship is something that i'll always love to get high on...
what else? well i sort of loved everything about your poem and congratulations on writing such an amazing thing. and as you wolud know by now, I'm not were good at nitpicking (if there is any) so I'll leave it for others.
gr8 job,
fangirl~