Young Writers Society

Hello! SilloriaD here with another crap-tastic poetry review- that's, of course, to say my reviewing sucks, not your writing skills.

So, I'll agree with the previous reviewer- the diction in this is stunning. You have a clear gift when it comes to your word choice. I like the variety of rhymes, as longer poems can often suffer from repeated rhyming. I feel like the extra lines with a single period are unnecessary to be completely honest. I feel like they break everything up a little too much, y'know? Without them, the flow would be much better. Leaving a blank line between stanzas would be better, in my opinion.

I loved the ocean imagery. It really painted a beautiful picture in my mind, and I'll definitely revisit this piece in the near future because of this (and by revisit I mean screenshot because I'm afraid of losing the link).

Keep writing!
-SilloriaD

I absolutely adore this poem. The diction used for this piece was fantastic and the flow of the poem was perfect. The poem was creative and different from the usual you see on this website. The change of setting as you blink was interesting to me also. I enjoyed the use of blinking to transition; that was intelligent and shows a great writing imagination. Your imagery was spot on also. I highly enjoyed your poem and hope you continue to write masterpieces like this.