The Narcissist

Hi. This is kman134. i'm here to review.

This is good. this is pretty good.

The first stanza shows the attitude all narcissists see in others. He/she would see them as lesser than him/her. treating them all like mortals while treating himself/herself like a god.

The third stanza expresses the flaws of man and how they fear to be betrayed. A narcissist is known for being greedy and vindictive, taking every petty remark and worthless gesture serious and insulting. They would put those before them down, plaguing their insecurities and manipulating them to their downfall.

The last stanza makes a reference to another flaw narcissists have. They always believe they could do no wrong, even though what they do is immoral and judgmental. However, they are so far up in their world, they believe they are perfect.

Anyway, this is pretty good. Although you need to add more details like how to tell when someone is a narcissist. i hope you write more.

Hello! herbgirl here for a review!
To start, i would like to say i like this poem. i get the impression that you have developed a very strong character here, and honestly i can see and understand their views, which is always a good thing. It's important to have your characters portrayed in a way where your audience can see themselves relating to them, and i felt you did that well here.
Now, on to my edits. i believe this was done intentionally, due to how often it occurred throughout the poem, but the flow was really off. i couldn't understand why, since the awkward line breaks don't appear to be contributing to a statement being made or in any other way engaging the reader. i felt that they more confused me than helped pull me into the poem, and i was struggling to insert pauses where the line breaks occurred, until i was at a point where i was ignoring the line breaks all together, just so i could understand your words. So, i would highly suggest adjusting your line breaks so that the poem is easier to read. Just read your poem to yourself, inserting pauses at the end of each line, and see if it sounds natural or not, and if it doesnt shift some words around until it does.
The other major thing i noticed in this poem was lack of punctuation. Now, don't call me a hypocrite, i leave out the punctuation in my work quite often, but i usually insert line breaks to signify a pause instead. Due to the lack of punctuation, lines like "As they scatter scrambling sourly..." are rather confusing. Plus, you do include periods, which makes the audience feel as if you may be using punctuation, but then since you're not, it just feels rather unfinished. i suggest you unify it one way or another, either no punctuation at all, or all necessary punctuation.
i had one other small suggestion, regarding word choice. Where you say "Hear!', it feels a bit awkward. i suggest using a different, more poetic word. i feel as if "hark" would fit in nicely, but you could use "listen", too.
Whew! Sorry if that seemed a little harsh. The content of this poem was very appealing, though, and these details could just help that content be easier understood by the reader. But, as you know, if you feel the ideas you want to communicate are well transmitted as is, keep it this way, you already have a wonderful piece!
herbgirl

This was really neat to read and im hoping you do a positive characteristic next, maybe a optimist next or a pessimist.

Also these could be longer if you write the opposite of them and how to notice a narcissist when you see one.

Nice one